In a Flicker of Light

In a Flicker of Light

A Poem by Green Regol
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When you realize time is almost up.

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Here I stand gasping
And grasping for minutes
That slipped through my fingers
Too long ago.
I pushed the clock's hands
Thinking we had time.
I tore through weeks and months
And brought that day closer.
How many moments can we pack in an instant?
What can we do in a flicker of light?
My throat's closed and my chest is tight,
And I realize what this is.
It's the shock of seeing something
In the distance
Appear on your doorstep 
Before you can turn.

© 2017 Green Regol


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Green Regol
Open to any and all suggestions.

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Green Regol,

The only suggestion I have for you is to keep writing, you have done an amazing job of word and phrase usage. Out of this world, it knocked me off of my chair; "how many moments can we pack in an instant?" wow.

Gasping for minutes that slipped through my fingers...this is an absolutely amazing line. To this I tip my hat and thank you for being a writer.

We all throw words on a page in hopes to make someone’s day or touch their heart for reasons we will never know. Today, it is your day... because you have done just that.

I am so happy I stumbled upon your work, here, and I will be back plenty more times to relive this happy moment (and possibly learn something, too).

Thank you for sharing,

Legacy

You should place this in Poetic Infusion contest, Enlightenment (if you haven't already submitted into it; if you have already, well, no wonder).


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I genuinely love this piece it brings about a certain something that I just enjoy :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"people always leave"

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A wonderful write. The emotion pours through.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I feel a hurried feel throughout this piece (by design). I can actually imagine ending this with the third stanza or moving the last stanza to the forth.

Anyway...I enjoyed reading this:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i seldom review to offer constructive criticism. i review to let the writer know how the piece affected me. however, since you requested some suggestions, here's a go at it. :-)
the image of a person gasping and grasping in the first line sets me up to anticipate the image or metaphor being extended throughout the poem but that doesn't happen.as time passes in the poem, the gasping and grasping image seems to disappear. perhaps instead of "a fit of surprise ..." in stanza four, instead of "my heart stops", maybe something like "my breath stops ...." that would continue the imagery in first stanza and maintain the idea of the effect on the poem's character. that's it, i'm out.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I enjoyed this thought provoking poem alot!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

well written and great word choice

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very nice reality of original love,

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Green Regol,

The only suggestion I have for you is to keep writing, you have done an amazing job of word and phrase usage. Out of this world, it knocked me off of my chair; "how many moments can we pack in an instant?" wow.

Gasping for minutes that slipped through my fingers...this is an absolutely amazing line. To this I tip my hat and thank you for being a writer.

We all throw words on a page in hopes to make someone’s day or touch their heart for reasons we will never know. Today, it is your day... because you have done just that.

I am so happy I stumbled upon your work, here, and I will be back plenty more times to relive this happy moment (and possibly learn something, too).

Thank you for sharing,

Legacy

You should place this in Poetic Infusion contest, Enlightenment (if you haven't already submitted into it; if you have already, well, no wonder).


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on July 29, 2011
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Tags: time, moment, instant, clock, tick, slip, day, minute, week, month, heart, beat, shock, distance, love, sad, doorstep

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