There's a storm coming

Half baked

Petal dreams

White flowers

Pink seams

Blow across

Pavement dark

Tiny runners

No marks

Rain drops

Hold them down

Thunder rolls

No other sound

Author's Note

Feedback?

Reviews

[Franky]

I think this topic is exciting. Maybe I'm wierd...but the coming of a storm is like a movie to me.

I like how this builds.

[olla]

I keep coming back to this one.. I haven't figured out just what it is.. maybe it's the series of storms that each line congers.. well done..

[Nolo Segundo]

I like this very much! It has the feel of a true haiku-- R U familiar with the form? Essentially it's a subtle way of using nature to evoke a profound, unstated message in the reader. You should try your hand at it.

[Neville]

There is something just a little bit special here... I like it and can't understand why you have not had anyone leave their opinion before me... with a bit of luck, they will now....

Alternatively try placing your guitar next to the speaker and pumping the volume... voila instant feedback... All Good Things, Neville