Cold Eyes

No longer the person I once knew

Lost but still
Crying for change but always smiling in the place you hate

Pleasure outweighs the guilt

Dying little by little when looking in those eyes
Searching for a hint of the one I once was

Reviews

[Bear]

Critique: (Pleasure out weighs the guilt) outweighs

Review: With growth comes change, sadly that growth sometimes is in a different direction, so growing up can also mean growing apart. Your poem does a good job of highlighting the reality of this situation. Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Cyndy Robinson]

Each to his own. To me this poem is about self reflection, a guy loving a girl, but cheating on her, and incapable of stopping. The title, the smiling in the place you hate, and Pleasure outweighs the guilt, seem to slam that home for me. I love the the way Pleasure outweighs the guilt is placed in this poem. It really stands out. Nice Job.

[V]

Really like those thoughts. "Pleasure outweighs the guilt"; I can relate to that somehow.
Simple but expressive.

[Scrap]

Quite powerful....reflection

[Uche Paul]

Short & concise... Vivid, well set & excellent.

But, about your confusion: All I can say now is you are discovering who you really should be, although it seems like you are lost. Self discovery is like an adventure into the dense wood of bees that has Combs!

[matpat]

pretty good, very original.

[Coyote Poetry]

I do understand this poem.
"Dying little by little when looking in those eyes
Searching for the hint of the one I once was"
Sometimes we can lose our place and thoughts. Need to re-set our life. Thank you Gregory for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[B J Hughes]

Very mysterious in its melancholy. This reader is finding two poems here: one where you are looking into someone else's eyes. The other where you are looking into your own eyes. Your words could apply to either scenario very well. Presentation and flow are very good, the way it is "constructed" captures and holds my attention. Very well done all the way around! Major props for the mystery!

[PhoenixDown]

Short piece, but powerful. I see a man
a man looking at himself,
a man thinking about decisions he has made, and how he should have perhaps made different choices.
I think I see someone drowning, but that must mean that they are not yet fully drowned....

[Insight "MH"]

A psychology conflict between what is and what one desires, you made the poem a live person who speaks to us and wails. Nicely written.

[Blackheart]

Loved the theme and the flow of words. Indeed, life sometimes withers away due to reasons sometimes known. Sometimes unknown. Beautifully portrayed. Loved it!