Surreptitious

Inspired by Michael LaSalle's 'Mysterious Desire'. Perhaps of a different theme, but inspired by it, none the less.

Surreptitious

 

 

Do not tease

Do not follow me with such surreptitious desire

Be open, and give yourself wholly unto me

 

My flesh aches to know what darkness clouds your eyes

When you think of me

So, you must not tease

 

Do stars not burn?

Do hearts not yearn?

Let us

 

Let us feel impending heights

Then, let us crash

Into one... smoldering... heap

 

 

4/28/2008

Reviews

[Shell]

That's hot. Aflame with desire. Can I get some ice water please? lol
The flesh aches, and the blood burns right along with those stars.

I love the ending.
..."one... smoldering... heap."

Very simple yet effective. Your point was driven home in as few words as possible. Which mirrors that particular moment, wouldn't you say? The last thing you want to do is talk!

[Your Tasty Field Adviso..]

oooooooooooooo, such passion within this poem. i love it. i burns with a wild imagination and a great view of life and opinion. i love it. great poem

[Norma J. Jessee]

I could feel the ache in my soul and the yearning as I read this.
Very effective piece.
Love it.

[None]

Emotions tower here in your perfectly written poem. I really like the repition of "Let us" and all that surrounds it. This is beautifull and artfully written with such feeling.

[Ralphy]

Unbelievable choice of words. do stars not burn...need I say more. great write.

[FEASH]

sick :)
in a good way of course ^-^
♥ it.

[Lalli]

great piece, i must say, I will ahve to go read "Mysterious Desire" which was the inspiration.

Perfect use of surreptitious, contextually.. the poem is really brought together with that word, so very appropriatly titled. In a request to quit hiding a secret desire, and let the passion burn freely.

glad I got to read it.

much love n' respect

-Lalli

[shadadakiya]

very hot and sexy a blazing love poem that's what it seems to me great write

[Dan Bullock]

That opening has a lip biting moment and some connotation all wrapped into one parcel, very good stuff and such feeling in this one. :)

[James K. Blaylock]

I greatly enjoyed this piece. And this stanza was truly awesome...

Do stars not burn?

Do hearts not yearn?

Let us


jkb