Heavy Breathing

A variation of Breathe Easy.

A hundred dwindled cancer sticks littered about my feet,

But society painted a picture that made it look so sweet,

So another man's discarded filth became this young man's jewel,

Now I am stuck cool.

Author's Note

Which poem is better?

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

I feel that this poem is about smoking...Good to shed light on its effects...:)...................

[Grislobo]

You nailed it like a split hog haha. Glad you enjoyed the message!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)........................

[Kitten]

I prefer this one over the other, it's really good! So short but I have an entire story in my mind of the smoker and how he was influenced! Amazing. keep it up :D