The Lone Tree

A paragraph describing some scenery of a tree in my backyard.

The ground used to be green; now it is pale like the moon on a clear, night sky. The snow has fallen, and only brown bristles remain; but for how long? Those thickets of bristle were once sturdy, and now they appeared to be dainty; fading ever so slowly, they were warring with the cold, harsh snow; but inevitably the snow will win, it always does. The leaves on the lone tree have fallen, and now the hundreds of bare branches rattle in the wind like soulless arms flailing aimlessly as if they were chasing the very leaves that kept them warm and bodacious; but most of all colourful, which was an illusion of grandeur on this colourless canvas. The sky, much like everything else, is bleak and lacks colouration; even the sun’s rays have been hampered by the dull clouds that draped the once-blue sky.

Author's Note

I am fairly certain I am misusing semicolons. If you find any errors with punctuation, grammar, or anything, please do not hesitate to point them out. Any criticism is welcomed.

Reviews

[S. R. Gamez]

Hi Gucci. I used to write exactly like this...in paragraph form. But I found that if you write in lines and stanzas, even if you don't necessarily know the rules (like me), it does impact the power of the work. It helps to turn the thoughts into images in the reader's head. I love the line "and now the hundreds of bare branches rattle in the wind like soulless arms flailing aimlessly". It seems to me that if you did format this in a line and stanza style it would have a great positive impact on the feel of the read.

Just a suggestion. Hope it helps. And I always enjoy works inspired by trees. To me trees are very spiritual.