Candle Haiku

Candle Haiku

A Poem by GunMetal

From the wick.

With smoke as my shame,
I am killing the candle
by feeding the flame.

© 2012 GunMetal

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o.O Very well written. As I read more poems, I'm getting more and more attracted to three-verse poems.

Posted 4 Years Ago

The double meaning (which I hope is really there and not my imagination) grabbed me. The universality of one thing feeding off another. Or that which feeds us may also consume.

Posted 4 Years Ago

Nice work Nicholas. Enjoyed this one.

Posted 4 Years Ago

I have never been one for haiku, they are so short I feel restricted, but I really enjoyed this one. To feel sympathy for the candle, I never would have thought of that. Nice work.

Posted 6 Years Ago

This is intriguing yet a joy to read. Excellent work. I hope all is well.

Posted 7 Years Ago

Oh, this is very interesting. Killing the candle by feeding the flame. Such an insightful view. And so appropriate to so many things in life. I am impressed. That doesn't happen that frequently, but this is marvelous.

I really enjoyed this. HIghest marks!

My very best regards,


Posted 7 Years Ago

Great...nicely done...Syberrose

Posted 8 Years Ago

Captivating :)

Posted 8 Years Ago

Very cool haiku!

Posted 8 Years Ago

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