Candle Haiku

From the wick.

With smoke as my shame,

I am killing the candle

by feeding the flame.

Reviews

[justjenn_2u]

Thinking as a poet, the smoke is your ember burning, you smolder that only to ignite it further. It's a concept that makes me want to dig your brain and I love the mystery. Go man, WRITE ON!!

[Amelie]

Like, every bit of your work in here, (those I've read by far) kicks a*s; may it be a haiku, a 3- word or 8-stanza poetry. Your muse is pretty bad a*s, I wanna meet her.

[Horizon K.]

Wow, beautiful!

[Kim]

Ah, the beauty of irony. I love it. So concise yet so profound. Don't change a single word.

[Ruth]

This is perfection, could be taken so many ways and that is what I love about it ♥

[Baby Ricochet]

I like it.

[That_Girl]

This is brilliant... one of the best I've seen on here by far.

[~Dragon X]

Wow, I just clicked this because it caught my attention, and it is so simple yet so meaningful. I love this. :D The first and last lines even rhyme, which isn't so easy to do in a haiku ^^'