Distance

Distance

A Poem by GunMetal
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Time is a feeling, and it's the only thing that the distance between us is measured in.

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The roads are viscous in the daylight.
I get lost in the distance
trying not to measure my journeys
in time or in miles.
I measure them in song lengths.
On any given day
you could be six punk rock songs away.
Or one and a half Dream Theater songs.
And I still find reasons not to go to you.

The place you go to heal
it will resemble your deepest wound.
All brick, bourbon and pyre.
You've got your hands so full of grief that you can't even hold your fire.
I'd need only look for the place that smells of your inferno.

Don't think for a second that I mind burning for you.
It's the distance that bothers me.

© 2012 GunMetal


Author's Note

GunMetal
I've been away for a while. This is one of the first poems I've written in over a year. I'll be sure to return the favor for anyone who reviews this =)

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'The place you go to heal
it will resemble your deepest wound.'

That's fantastic, the poem has a sort of rhythm to it that's not exactly meter... it's just natural it seems. Measuring your time with an artform is a very novel way to go about it I think, unique and very well-written.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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I think you captured the essence of time well, I found your measure insanely good 'punk songs & Dream Theater' ....dope! Great crafting! Regards Ray

Posted 3 Years Ago


All brick, bourbon, and pyre. I really enjoyed this line in that it tells a story all by itself. I also really liked the first stanza, and the nonchalant, yet interesting way you introduce your story. I enjoy your style, and the way you say a lot, and with so little. I think the last stanza needs some twisting. Somehow it is not satisfactory, and doesn't match the eloquence shown throughout the rest of the work. Just my humble opinion. Thanks for the write!

Posted 7 Years Ago


well written poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


This poem is really good, I love how you measure the distance between you both by the songs instead of the miles. "Don't think for a second that I mind burning for you" such a good line.

Posted 7 Years Ago


You make me want to write more. You give off creativity.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I remember with some of the words being in this place with a long distant love back in the day. This captures and sums up what your saying so perfectly. Great job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


You have captured a beautiful potrayal of the essense of true love!

A wonderful flow of words penned beautifully :o)


Posted 7 Years Ago


i love how you associated the distance with songs. great poem! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Amazing.. Beautiful. I loved it!

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Wish You Were Here, Alta Loma, CA



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