Adam's Evil - Adam's Eve

I am you

But you aren't me

I am Adam

And you are Eve

My eyes are blinded

Because they see

I am mankind �"

Adam and Eve

I am Darkness

Because I’m free

I am Adam

And I am Eve

I lived and cared

I loved in Deed

Thus was Adam

Slain by Eve

Lost and hurting

Adam grieved

And Adam ran

Away from Eve

Stifled then

By wicked greed

Adam sought

Another Eve

Is being heartless

Woman’s creed??

Adam was broken

By another Eve

Then seeing the banned

A forbidden tree

Adam plucked

Cursed him and Eve

The torn will cut

And die in need

But Adam is best

Away from Eve

So save me from myself

I am my thorns and weeds

I am my worst enemy

For I am Adam…

I am Eve.

 

 

Author's Note

How does the message communicate? Is it clear enough?

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i find it interesting...to me, man is such a strong indivdual, but his Krypton is woman...she will beat him every time...he might get to eat the fruit, but she dictates the pace and the outcome...and sometimes we fall for one Eve after another.

like the wording in this.

[Gurglesnarch van Caasi]

Often, yes, that does seem to be the case.
Thank you very much for the kind review. I'm happy you liked this one!

[s y e]

Your title had me intrigued ~ I really do think we are our own worst enemy for sure; I think we are harder on ourselves that others are, trying to be perfect... but why be perfect? Being perfect would be boring, am I right? but sometimes we can be that wee bit too hard on ourselves.

Kudos, I loved this one.

[Gurglesnarch van Caasi]

I'm not sure if being perfect would be boring or not, since it seems to be impossible. but there is honor in reaching the highest attainable state of perfection maybe? And perhaps we are hard on ourselves too much sometimes...
Thank you so much for the review; I'm glad you like it, Tortellini :D

[Mike Wolfe]

It was incredibly deep, the message is definitely conveyed. It is slightly unclear, but to me that seems to add a sense of mystery. Like fog in a horror story. A crystal clear image doesn't cut it there, and to me, it wouldn't be as impactful if it wasn't written exactly as is. Congrats, this is my new favorite.

[Gurglesnarch van Caasi]

Thank you very much, and yes I was aiming for something that wasn't so black and white as usual. I'm glad you like it!

[Frieda P]

Wow what an intriguing concept, yes we are always our own worst enemy, like the analogy you presented here, brilliant the way you wove this one, where's the serpent? I'm sure it's all his fault. Bravo!

[Gurglesnarch van Caasi]

Haha yes perhaps the serpent was to blame for some of it, but when there is a choice, there is responsibility :)
Thank you very much & I'm happy you liked it!

[Frieda P]

Yeah real life's a b***h ha, my pleasure. ;-)