Beautiful Anguish

Resurrect my pain

And turn it into music

Find beauty in my hurt

For I have naught

Fill a wine glass with my

Shimmering tears and drink it

My anguish is so strong and I am not.

 

Beat me to a pulp

And I will still forgive you

Take and kill my soul

For I am done

I am much too weak to

Hold you or even fear it

My confusion holds and c***s the gun.

 

Pull on the trigger

And drive the bullet through me

Slam it through my brain

For I am lost

My thoughts are too twisted

To ever disentwine them

Life promised much, but lied about the cost.

Reviews

[Jack...]

Darkness has invaded your pen my friend. This one sank hard into my gut. Such pain and anguish carries through in each line.

[Gurglesnarch van Caasi]

thank you for the review! I'm glad the idea was crystal clear and the emotion was strong throughout, at least that was my intention!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"life promised much, but lied about the cost"

great line...the paradoxes and oxymorons here are delightfully disarming...no matter what you do, i am not strong enough not to love you.

you make me weak.

well done.

[Gurglesnarch van Caasi]

Thank you very much, sir. I appreciate the kind review and encouragement! So glad you liked it!

[Frieda P]

That's some stunning anguish you've painted here my friend.

Fill a wine glass with my
Shimmering tears and drink it

Love it, and that last stanza is killer! Going in my favorites toot sweet......

[Gurglesnarch van Caasi]

Thank you very much! I'm so happy you enjoyed it! :)

[Frieda P]

The pleasure was mine! :-)

[s y e]

My pasta joking friend, this was great. I loved it, I do agree with Sami in the way that it sounded quite like a song. It is different from your other writes, I like that! :)

Very much enjoyed....

[Gurglesnarch van Caasi]

Thank you buddy of noodles and eatery, I appreciate the review very much, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I was experimenting with different rhythms and meters

[Sami Khalil]

This sounded like a song...Very different from your other works...Splendid...:)....................

[Gurglesnarch van Caasi]

Thank you so much! Glad you liked it!

[Sami Khalil]

I did...You are welcome...:)....................