Tragic is The Girl In Black

Tragic is The Girl In Black

A Poem by guy drori

  Tragic

is the girl in black--

the reason for her darkness

and cause of utter wrack.

 

She fears the morning light--

knowing merely night.

Her inner-demons -- self-destructive--

never could she fight.

 

She is a spider

in the corner--

wishes to become a bird.

Oh, but how absurd!

She wouldn't know to fly

even if she'd try.

 

Subconsciously

she weaves her webs

of poison and deceit.

Inner-voices-- devils--

wishes to defeat.


Positive her family 

love her wrongly so,

for all she brings upon her land

is acid rain

and snow.

 

"Kill me!" Yells the girl

in black--

tragic

is her life.

All around her hold a spoon-

solely she a knife.

© 2016 guy drori


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Even darkness cannot just exist in the shadows. Thriving on pain is merely a habit macabre cries for help eventually we all need that light. Great piece. R xo

Posted 4 Years Ago


guy drori

4 Years Ago

Thank you for the review. And I agree, even the darkest ones seek light one way or another
Black is what it is, a cloak to hide the insecurity of life.
But even this girl wants the light to shine upon her.
Is it to late. Who knows.

Posted 4 Years Ago


guy drori

4 Years Ago

Thank you for the review Paul.
Yes, your words are true I believe. She does want the light t.. read more
and yet deep inside she is crying out for someone to see the positives in her, what she has to offer...
she seems to thrive on pain...like someone i know well...but there is a heart that wants to be freed...wants to be noticed for what she can give---

a dark journey here, but i see someone who really wants to get to the light...

some seek attention by being macabre...but the inner voice is crying for help...for a light.

j.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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guy drori

4 Years Ago

Appreciate the review Jacob :)
I am glad you saw the poem for what I wrote it to be. Yes, the.. read more
Beautiful. Just beautiful.

Inner demons are always the hardest to fight. You want to stop the endless cycle, but you never quite know how to escape from its clutches.

Posted 4 Years Ago


guy drori

4 Years Ago

Thank you for reviewing :)
Yes, it is like an endless cycle which is destructive, and difficu.. read more
Well written my friend, well written in deed!! And so powerful can the human shadow grow!!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


guy drori

4 Years Ago

Thanks for the encouraging review :) Glad you enjoyed it . . . And I agree - the human shadow can gr.. read more
favorite lines: spider wishes to be a bird, all around her hold a spoon, only she a knife

Posted 4 Years Ago


guy drori

4 Years Ago

Thank for the review!
Yes, those were actually my favorite lines as well - they show that she.. read more
Wow! Hauntingly beautiful!
Loved the eloquent flow and vivid imagery, so very much.
Last stanza is plain awesome!

PS: in second stanza, third line, I feel that you meant 'her' instead of 'he'.

Posted 4 Years Ago


guy drori

4 Years Ago

Thank you for your comment... glad you liked it :)
And yes, thank you for the correction. It .. read more
Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

No problem.
You are welcome.
And she seems very tragic indeed. Well represented.

Posted 4 Years Ago


guy drori

4 Years Ago

Thank you....
Great poem. You portray her darkness so well. Nicely written...


Posted 4 Years Ago


guy drori

4 Years Ago

Thank you . . . appreciate the comment :)
Photo gave life to your words and I liked the tale told in the poem. Must be careful twisted woman lost in the darkness. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Years Ago


guy drori

4 Years Ago

Thank you Coyote ;)
Coyote Poetry

4 Years Ago

You are welcome.

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What is life without art? I've been writing since I was 8 years old, and it is my main passion. I love inspiring other people & being inspired by others. Nothing is more satisfying than finishing a ma.. more..

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