The Choice is Yours

The Choice is Yours

A Poem by guy drori
"

Which side wins? The one you choose to take . . .

"
He stood
on her left

while
the other floated
on her right.

A hiss of a snake
slithering around her ear--
ordering her
to do it!
while
a chirp of a robin
hopping above her head--
asking of her
to avoid.


The edge of a knife
seductively stroking her neck--
explaining it is solely
for the best,
while
the softness of a feather
gently patting her shoulder--
saying it is only
for the worse.


An aura of evil
painting her thoughts in black--
arousing her senses 
long were dormant,
while
an aura of good
attempting to color her thoughts in white--
 soothing her senses
in need of rest.

Victory!
For he was too attractive to resist
as she sleeps with the devil
among flames of destruction
while
failure!
For he was not enough tempting
and she banishes the angel
back to the heavens.

DARKNESS  



© 2018 guy drori


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You are very clever.

I imagine two tiny little a*****e versions of myself. . .
reading these words to the other. It's delightful.

You've got them ++ skills and s**t. It's not easy to write well and have a genuinely clever presentation Well done sir, well done.


Posted 2 Years Ago


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guy drori

2 Years Ago

Thanks for the review. Amd yes, I think we all have a dark and light side that each is complicated b.. read more
I've said it to other writers before, but I'll say it again~ I love poetry that not only uses words, but spacing and structure in a creative way.

I love the look and feel of this poem. By putting the two points of view on opposite sides of the screen, you have created more than just a reading experience, but a visual one.

Well done!

Yari

Posted 3 Years Ago


guy drori

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your review Yari.
And yes, I agree- granting a visual experience to the reader .. read more
Wow!! Isn't this just the way life gives us situations to make ethical choices. An agonizing ending though for following the instinct instead of conscience. And the right was on the right...it was a clever image you made.

Posted 4 Years Ago


guy drori

3 Years Ago

Thanks for the review, appreciate it. And yes I definitely agree with you (And sorry for the late re.. read more
Nice write, deep and some what truthful. You might want to edit the last word to DARKNESS instead of the word DARNNESS. Valentine

Posted 4 Years Ago


guy drori

3 Years Ago

Thanks for the comment Valentine, and you're right! Have to edit the mistake I did with the word 'Da.. read more
I love the way you presented this work visually as well as the images that were portrayed. I think many of us can relate to the temptations and the struggle to follow one's head. Great piece of writing, indeed.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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guy drori

4 Years Ago

Thank you Dara . . . very much appreciated.
Yes, I think that many people can relate to the c.. read more
Dara

4 Years Ago

Ah, I know of the quote of which you speak. It is a profound one.
The entire time I was reading this I pictured those cartoons with an angel on one shoulder and a tiny devil on the other. I loved the layout of the poem. I think it really did justice to it and really helped organize the story. Can't wait to read more of your writing!

Posted 4 Years Ago


guy drori

4 Years Ago

Thank you . . . I appreciate your review.
Indeed, when I wrote this I also imagined what you.. read more

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What is life without art? I've been writing since I was 8 years old, and it is my main passion. I love inspiring other people & being inspired by others. Nothing is more satisfying than finishing a ma.. more..

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