I Know In Time

This is a poem that I wrote a few months ago. It's my attempt at a villanelle...:)

I know in time this feeling it shall pass.

My pain just like your love will fade and die.

My heart no longer cracked like broken glass.

You promised me forever but alas

You could not keep your vow, I know not why.

I know in time this feeling it shall pass.

 

 

                           Our first kiss was outside upon the grass.

Your lips saw through my lonely soul to spy

A heart no longer cracked like broken glass.

 

 

And in an instant love was forged like brass.

Enduring and steadfast, O what a lie.

I know in time this feeling it shall pass.

 

 

For now ill will and spite look to surpass

Those tender moments. How I wish that my,

My heart was whole not cracked like broken glass.

 

 

And so with words not meaning to harass

I bid you my sweet love one last goodbye.

I know in time this feeling it shall pass,

My heart no longer cracked like broken glass.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I'm not a big fan of villanelles becuz they often sound repetitive without a purpose to me. However, I'm amazed at how you incorporated this form, more or less, along with an extended rhyme in an unusual pattern! That's quite a bit of word crafting, very impressive. My favorite part is the rhyming . . . it's not easy to rhyme on the same sound so much & still keep it fresh (which you did) *smile* Fondly, Margie

[θεά]

What a quaint little tribute to the love that is lost! No excessive romanticizing that which had been, no puerile bemoaning of what could have been, no vitriolic anger at what it had become. A simple declaration of a heart that seems broken for now, one which allows itself to feel the pain as it stands for now and a sweet parting wish- to help both move on.

One of the more matured ways of handling rupture.

Good work, Adam.

Best,
M.