a drunkan notion

whisper

no sense of lust

you must

gather yourself and die

or better yet, offer your bust

to bury a  dying man

 

streets of shadow and dust

dust and sand and fog

but as long as your "self"

is never with these filled

you can't be a dirty dog

 

nasty, bloody and cruel

but very truthful and just

but rust

is eating up your once shiny heart

 

Reviews

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

I taste the bitter thoughts, great write! ---mishel :)

[Avoiry]

nasty, bloody and cruel
but very truthful and just
but rust
is eating up your once shiny heart


I love this , favorite part by far. This whole piece has a swaying tone but is a good read. One concept is that you cant be tainted without being truly dirty which i found interesting as your second stanza hints at that. though the rusting hints that your headed toward being dirty. Interesting piece, i liked it.