His Valerie In The Sky

His Valerie In The Sky

A Poem by Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)
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Inspired by a car ride home with my son, one of his first hints that he was indeed, growing up.

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seasons promptly trade places
as frost-bitten fingers open
to the charming warmth of
untrodden petals offering sunshine

his wide, youthful eyes tilt skyward
brimming with the potential
that "maybe" offers so sweetly;
the hearty allowance of adolescence

a passing silhouette of clouds
gently whispers of her memory,
her face set in optimistic blue
and puppy love transcends the playground

he leans on an experienced ear,
wondering if infatuation is kind
still clinging to maybe, hopeful
his affecting Valerie is looking up...

and thinking of him too

© 2020 Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)


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Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)
Your honest thoughts are welcome, thank you for reading.

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Delightful moments you have captured here of time spent with your son. Those little nuggets that stay with us and make us smile in years to come. How could you ever forget this? Wonderfully conveyed poem Travis. Warms the heart.

Chris

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you, Chris... you've left me feeling accomplished!
Chris Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

So you should be :)
this is such a great picture of you hanging with your son facing life front on but keeping the infinite poetic possibilities within the realm of magic we call life. this makes me smile, small moments with those we adore for no other reason that they are essentially us ... you have a very nice poetic vibe :D

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you... this indeed was a moment to adore. I'm pleased I've seemed to have done it some kind of.. read more
Hello, Travis! :)
This is lovely. It reminds me of when my wife was my girlfriend, and life was less rigid.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

3 Weeks Ago

Yes, those less rigid times many of us miss. Thanks for the kind review.
Lovely, puppy love is the best thing to happen to a young child

Posted 1 Year Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

1 Year Ago

That it is, and it was one of the greatest things to experience, organically. Thank you for the wond.. read more
The wonderfulness of your writing Travis is that it flows so effortlessly and is a blessing to read. So many visions I had during this, the name lingered before I read the poem, the son and father discussion and contact, a closeness that is always a gift to behold...I could envision this car ride, so beautifully rendered :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Ruth, your thoughts are truly humbling.
"the hardy allowance of adolescence"
… that my friend is one of the better lines you'll find anywhere.

I'm not entirely sure what to make of this poem. Is it love or is it lust? At that age, what's really the difference?

At any age, actually. Even the middle aged and above can find a crush or an object of lust if they're very lucky.

Puppylove is ageless for the very lucky. The years dull the excitement for pretty much all of us eventually unfortunately.

Thank god for pornhub… if you ever find a gal who's not afraid of porn, don't let go.
(this was less of a review and more of me just rambling, sorry about that)







Posted 1 Year Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

1 Year Ago

It's more than ok, no need to apologize. I know that the words just pick us up, and carry us sometim.. read more
you were blessed in that ride weren't you Mr. Travis!? what i see most in this poem is a pretty close and special relationship between father and son ... for him to seek advice about anything is near miracle as it gets ... teen rebellion being what it is ;) these lines for me are especially profound:
"he leans on an experienced ear,
wondering if infatuation is kind" ... me thinks in most cases it is not ... it brings with it too much insanity to care much at all ... for anything but its own fire and blaze ... smooth read ... sticks to the theme ... characters and scene easy to relate to ... being Da of 2 boys and 2 girls ... all grown ..great use of the language sir! well done!
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

1 Year Ago

Yes, I was indeed blessed during that ride home. I'm a father of 6, and it's been nothing but a bles.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

its a keeper sir! :)
I like the way the first verse acts as a symbol for the boy, spring being a symbol for adolescence. What follows is a tender picture of young love. Also liked the thought of the youth leaning on "an experienced ear," and wondering "if infatuation is kind." I hope he was given realistic advice. Young love can be a rough ride sometimes.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

1 Year Ago

Young love is indeed a rough ride. i hope I said exactly what needed to be said to preserve his sens.. read more
Coming of age, listening to wiser ears, spreading the wings of freedom, searching for own path... A gorgeous poem about a son unfurling those wings, learning to fly in reality helped by a wise father and poet.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

1 Year Ago

A coming of age indeed, fatherhood is truly a gift. Thank you for the glowing review, and sincere in.. read more
Sami Khalil

1 Year Ago

You are welcome sir.
Judy Fracaro in grade school was my Valerie.
damn, i love this...
the first stanza just blew me away....and i never got back until the end.
splendid phrasing and crisp imagery, Travis.
wow!!!!!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

1 Year Ago

My "Valerie" was a young lady named, Victoria. I was one of the unfortunate young men, who learns th.. read more

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Added on April 16, 2020
Last Updated on April 22, 2020
Tags: youth, crush, love, desire, hope, puppylove

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