Napkin Stain

Within our souls lies ways untold,

what does each of us hold?

Problems of the, I told you so's.

I told you not write on that paper.

I told you no ink would save her.

Blood stained napkin says it all.

Give it back ,don't post a wall.

All dirty and stained ,on you I call.

This bloody napkin says it quite clearly.

I told you so, she is not nearly,

the girl I thought you would hold dearly.

This napkin is kissed in red not stained,

So smile ,I told you so's wrong again.

Reviews

[Firestone Feinberg]

This is terrific. I'm not sure I understand it, but I don't need to. I can just read it and be satisfied. This is well-integrated. A good composition. You are an artist. --FF

[Monster ^.^]

I read it three times to gather a message... It has a very wide scope for meaning so I had difficulty. I gathered the impression that they thought the girl was to reach her end because she was sick, and the boy who loves her is reminded of those things told to him before about how they would not end up being together... then they find out in the end that it was but a red lipstick stain so the bad reminders faded away. Did I get the message?

[Holly Mason]

I just reread I think it to be quite simple to understand
everyone hates failure for others but at the same time enjoy being right
he is told not to give her everything then he does I told you so bloody napkin can be many things...she cheats, addicted to drugs,whatever then in the end he made a right choice the I told you so's were wrong and not ashamed to admit it This site has actually gotten to me lately I have only been here two weeks but if I wanted to read roses are red poems I would to me poetry should cause a moment at least of thought but that is just me thank you I do not mean it should never be able to understood but at least a moment of thought thank you much again

[Monster ^.^]

I knew it had a deeper meaning! Thank you! It was really nice actually! I don't read poems more than thrice. If I don't get it, I don't get it... but this time, I really wanted to know its secrets... Very nice indeed :)

[Holly Mason]

Well I could of spent a little more time on it I only wrote it to support your new group!hahahaha thank you again

[Monster ^.^]

Well, you could make do with it more if you'd like... there's still a week before the contest ends :)) Thank you for the consideration, of course :)