Ravens Clouds

above the earth in ravens clouds

flying high, zipping wings proud 

surrender thoughts, let feeling go

staring down at the world below

touch the tassels flowing in breeze

cresting dawn with colors that please

light as a feather, no baring weight

flying high, souls only escalate 

a pattern of patience sewn in cloud

rising, soaring, the heartbeat loud

a little lower ,the forest in sight

grasping wings with pleasing delight

waterways guide, for this soul needs

a long cresting ride, casting of seeds

flying high, zipping wings flutter

letting go of unneeded clutter 

ravens clouds fly high like an eagle

commoner blood but still not regal 

Reviews

[prachi prangya agasti]

a nice poem.. and great use of imagery...

[Holly Mason]

thank you much ....fly high like a raven *)

[moblues]

As Sharon said, the imagery is what grabbed me. Nice poem, Holly.

I hate the rating thing, lol. :)




Mike

[Holly Mason]

thank you much for your kind words*)

[sharonlee]

Beautiful imagery and a glorious sense of freedom!

[Holly Mason]

freedom flyers*)
lovely words...thank you

[Cassie]

I love the spirit of the raven, it seems it has no cares, your poem shows that they are so happy as they fly higher and higher.

[Holly Mason]

higher and higher little lady
thank you truly

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Such vivid imagery in this one. I could feel the breeze beneath my proverbial wings as I read this one; the idea of soaring and seeing the world below in such stark detail was brilliant. The last lines, though, they really spoke to me. The metaphorical significance of the last two lines are...thought provoking. Well done, completely enjoyed this one.

[Holly Mason]

Thank you much Miss Friday and hey it is Friday*)

[Holly Mason]

I always love the way how you start and end your pieces... it has a good poetic rhythm in it... I love to read your writings out loud too. :) they always sound so well. And then the Raven is a magical bird.. most of the intelligent ones too, for it works together with wolves, and knows how to fly proper. Also the title makes me think for it's a double meaning. Very nice sweet Holly!

- Elisa

[Holly Mason]

a magical bird...like that*)
thank you beauty writer

[Stella Armour]

it would be wonderful to be able to soar upwards and view the world as a Raven, the imagery is beautiful Holly, the Eagle may well be more regal but sees no more than the Raven..

[Holly Mason]

beautiful words fine lady...beautiful words

[Jack...]

Holly, even the Raven is needed in this world to level things out. Your poem is beautiful, very enchanting my friend. I love they way you have built this and created a magical world for us to visit. Very nice my friend.