The Crash

The Crash

A Poem by Jared Michael Smith
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Just another poem created from the random lines of text that popped into my head.

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Shining eyes,
Like a fly's,
Speeding down
The highway.

ZOOM

Metal toys,
Buzzing noise,
Louder louder
Every day.

BUZZ

Faster faster,
Everlaster,
Until there
Comes a crash.

SPLAT

Staining red,
Mounting dead,
The bright and
Blinking flash.

© 2013 Jared Michael Smith


Author's Note

Jared Michael Smith
Really crappy, I know, but I could still use some opinions. Thanks guys and gals. :)

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Jared, I liked the form and I liked the use of onomatopoeia in this piece. Driving on the freeway always freaks me out. This is why. Thank you for submitting and congratulations for placing in this contest. Nicely done. Angi~

Posted 6 Years Ago


If I may, I fully object with this as crappy. No, it's not! I REALLY, REALLY, AWESOMELY enjoyed it! It is unique, it is original, and it is beautifully peculiar. I honestly believed it popped from your head because it flows very naturally. I LOVE this. I hope I made it crystal clear with this review. :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jared Michael Smith

6 Years Ago

Lol, well thank you very much. :) I just wasn't sure that people would be able to get exactly what.. read more
EloisaWrites

6 Years Ago

I actually read it twice because the first time I read it, I get confused with the second stanza. Th.. read more
Jared Michael Smith

6 Years Ago

Thank you! And I'm glad you found a favorite in my writing. :)

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Added on November 4, 2013
Last Updated on November 4, 2013
Tags: car, crash, fly, buzz, splat, faster

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Jared Michael Smith
Jared Michael Smith

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I'm a pretty mild-mannered guy who enjoys composing poetry, playing video games, and drawing portraits. I don't think my writing's that good, but some of the people I have had read tell me otherwise... more..

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