Melting (#2)

This came to me as I watched the ice melt outside... again.

Melting,

The ice turns to

Water,

Flowing away to

Unknown places,

Slowly but silently,

Revealing the ugly

Underneath.

Author's Note

I feel like this poem is a bit ambiguous, and I'm not sure if I should leave it like that or not. Any ideas?

Reviews

[EloisaWrites]

I think you should just left it like that. It is a poem, it is not a debate argument that should be explained like mad to be understood. Though, there are a lot of poems that is simply lost and felt like a maze (that causes headaches and nausea in their ambiguity), understanding poems, in my opinion is always either 1, an appeal to the intellect and 2, an appeal to the heart. Your poetry is more of the heart and at times, the macabre and it is brilliant just like that. Now, for this poem, it is ambiguous but it appeals to the senses. I like it as it is. :)

[Jared Michael Smith]

I'm glad you enjoy it and that you think my poetry appeals to the heart. :) That's all I want for it: to speak to someone on an emotional level so that they feel the emotions themselves.

[EloisaWrites]

You're doing a great job relating feelings. No worries.

[Jared Michael Smith]

Lol, thanks. :)