Brave New World

Brave New World

A Poem by Helen
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First new poem written since joining WritersCafe - an attempt to improve on my style while musing on what that means and relapsing just a little into my repetitive style!

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Thin watery moon, foggy day
Early walk, chance to pray.
Crisp under foot, cold old day
Striding out, no delay.


Looming hill, muddy walk
Up I go, no breath to talk.
Hilltop view, vigorous walk
The ground beneath me made of chalk.


And I think, I reflect
Lines of poetry flood my intellect.
Are they mine, I begin to muse
Are these my words that I must choose?


I've been inspired,encouraged, challenged
I've seen good and bad in my repetitive patterns.
I've seen the value of imagery and metaphor
and I'm stretching my mind to improve, Or


at least to be open to change.


Temptation here, it is so strong,
To repeat the first verse like in a song,
But if I am going to change, that would be wrong
I need to work out where I belong


in this brave new world of poetry.


I have a tendency to try to rhyme
Is that poetry, or from childish times?
Towards simplicity, I am inclined
Perhaps I'm not clever or refined


enough to live in this brave new world of poetry.


My walk nearly over and I conclude
My style is mine, but it would be rude
To ignore the advice, the food
for thought as I have been moved


by the poetic styles of true poets in the WritersCafe.


Stepping over my threshold
I decide to be bold -
I will try to adapt, but if the truth be told
I cant help but be me, and how I unfold


is a mystery even to me.


Back to the warmth of my home. 
There's no need to atone,
For I resisted the urge to repeat that first verse.
Instead, I sit with my pen and rehearse


and play with the words until something like a poem forms in front of me.


I have submerged myself, as far as I can
In this brave new world, so spick and span.
It's a new year, still early in Jan
A new start indeed, but first I plan


to indulge just once more in my repetitive style and explain in this brave new world who I really am


Anyone can write a rhyme
So simple, simple, simple
And so these poems, which are mine
Are simple, simple, simple
I'd like to be skilled at poetry
Not simple, simple, simple
But still, the words, they reflect me
And I am not so simple.

© 2021 Helen


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Metaphor, clever, rhyme, you are right. There is no need to atone for what comes naturally to the poet.
There is such a vast array of readers out there...many who appreciate the "simple, simple, simple" as you put it....but the words reflect the poet and also reflect the readers.
Sure some like the more complicated styles and might say that anything else is not poetry...but not true.
What we write is us...and that is the individuality and universality of the genre.
so go for it, Helen. Write you...
j.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Helen

3 Years Ago

I did think I had responded to this, but can't see it now - so apologies if it shows twice.
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I will own up to dinging you for being repetitive, many poems back. I don't believe you would be this way, but your poem could be taken as a spoof on me (& others) for being so presumptuous as to ding you for being repetitive. I mean, the way you repeat it a few times . . . I do believe you only mean to show how you're trying new things & reminding yourself . . . but becuz you repeat it, reminding yourself not to repeat, it could be taken as a bit of fun, a slap in the face to me.

I understand how you mean simple . . . I am often dinged for being too complex. But I think your poetry is more sophisticated & more nuanced than you realize. It seems you don't consider yourself one of the "true poets at Writerscafe" . . . since you set this group apart . . . but you better believe a poem like this one was written by a TRUE POET!!!! No doubt about it!!!

I'm guessing you might be so immersed in creative mojo, your lines contain complexities you're not even doing intentionally, but picking up on ambient poem magic, simply being open to the universe. I would guess that you couldn't imagine yourself as a satirist, but this delicious satire . . . and it's satire on me & others like me who dare to suggest you stray from your God-given natural tendencies *wink! wink!* OK . . . I'll get off my soapbox & let you have fun (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Helen

3 Years Ago

I hope I can express this well because I think what you have said in your review is the most importa.. read more
barleygirl

3 Years Ago

Thank you for a well-expressed & precious share! I'm definitely getting "magic" when I write reviews.. read more
Helen

3 Years Ago

*big smile* *big smile* *big smile*
You make a lovely expression here. Lately I've been trying to give myself the freedom to make poetry anything I want. There can be a lot of freedom in structured poetry, still a lot of freedom without. A thought on a walk while you talk to the muse won't disabuse or mock the flock of words and queue's. Put paper to pen and only then we can know your skews.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Helen

3 Years Ago

Everyone is talking about the muse. I didn't know I had one or what it was, but I'm beginning to und.. read more
So very nicely written, this is wonderful.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Helen

3 Years Ago

Thank you Kim
Just Kim

3 Years Ago

.....not a problem
Poetry (derived from the Greek poiesis, "making") is a form of literature that uses aesthetic and often rhythmic qualities of language—such as phonaesthetics, sound symbolism, and meter—to evoke meanings in addition to, or in place of, the prosaic ostensible meaning. And – whether short, long, simple, or complex – all are individual and reflective of the writer!

Your share has stimulated my ‘little grey cells’ and is an inspiration to others who share your expressions!

Great share... :-)


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Helen

3 Years Ago

Thank you. I did look up "what is poetry?" on the internet and decided that what I write is poetry, .. read more
good food for thought. what comes out is a reflection of what is inside the poet. it can be whatever you think and feel. you shouldn't fit any mold. your honest thoughts and feeling no matter the form. they follow no particularly format. whatever works for you, i say let it flow ... :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Helen

3 Years Ago

Thank you Pete. Appreciate your comments
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There is a skill in writing simple poetry, poetry that is frowned upon by some for not being "clever" enough, which is bollocks :))
You write what you wish Helen and let it be liked by those that appreciate the skills needed.
Were you walking on Dunstable Downs by any chance ?

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Helen

3 Years Ago

Small world! 🙂
Gee

3 Years Ago

Very small. Years ago sat chatting to a fellow when abroad on holiday, turned out he was in the proc.. read more
Helen

3 Years Ago

When those things happen, it is pretty startling. Makes you wonder about cosmic coincidences / conne.. read more
Personally I enjoy the simple poems because I am getting too lazy to have to try and interpret the meaning behind it all

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Helen

3 Years Ago

I like this - thank you 🙂
I really enjoyed what you have created here Helen. Be you, there is no need for you to mimic others. You have your own poetic voice which may evolve with time, just as mine has. Everything I started with was in rhyme, I still love it, but I have evolved. Be the natural you and let your muse point the way. Don't concern yourself with simple. Some of the stuff I like best is simply expressed, but tugs on the emotions and is so heartfelt. Just express yourself in your own unique way.

Chris

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Helen

3 Years Ago

Thank you Chris for your lovely encouragement and sharing your experience of how you have evolved. A.. read more
I think you summed it up yourself. It's your style of writing, the writing that makes you happy.
Every poet has their own way of writing, in a way it defines them. Poems to me are short stories, if they resonate even better. I don't know if you do this, but when you write a poem, leave it for a day then go back to it, you'll be amazed how this can your thinking on the poem.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Helen

3 Years Ago

It comes from within so in some ways I have little choice. I have to be me! Thank you for commenting.. read more
Paul Bell

3 Years Ago

Pleasure, Helen, welcome to the cafe.
yes anyone can rhyme but not master the words like you, I cry in what young and old see alike, yes let those live to find the paths, in which we have reach rhe top where the view is always the same.
its redemption very inspiring to see what we have. Thank you for sharing

Posted 3 Years Ago


Helen

3 Years Ago

Thank you for such generous comments!
Mauricio Montoya

3 Years Ago

forgive me i miss a few words in my review, but i did enjoy reading your work thank you

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Luton, Bedfordshire, United Kingdom



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