the tunnel

Like two trains passing 

each other in a tunnel 

the windows lighted from within 

illuminated faces flashing by

the rattling lasts but a short minute 

the shaking of the cars less than a second 

and you are left alone 

going fast 

into the endless dark 

Reviews

[Legacy]

Hester Grey,

I enjoyed this write, it was short and quick, yet had so many great points to be appreciated. Great descriptive words and sentences, maybe one or two too many conjunctions, but hey, great write.

The two trains - symbolic of people in their daily activities - indeed this is how our lives sadly exist.

Creative and energetic...

Great job,

Legacy

This should be entered into Poetic Infusion Society's contest, Enlightenment (that is if you have not yet entered).

[Chris]

Ever wander the subways above ground... the sidewalks where each person is so enwrapped they each are a subway car going elsewhere than anyone else?

Chris