Goodbye To My Old Relationship

Goodbye To My Old Relationship

I wrote a letter for you
I missed you every day,
I didn't want to tell you
Because I'm broken inside

You ignored my text messages
Burned all my letters,
You didn't want to talk to me
Because I was unforgiving,

You never answered my call
I feel sharp pain in my chest
You know it stabbed like knife
Deep inside to my heart,

I stand on this cliff alone,
I started having flashbacks
How you want me
How you loved me more?

Wish you're here with me,
You didn't want to see me
Heart is bleeding,
Tears stream down my cheeks,

My world falls apart,
My world started to tremble
I'm crying and sobbing,
You never want to see me

You start to kiss him
I hear lightning and thunder
His arms around you,
I feel the earthquake shakes

Now I'm on the edge
I said my last prayers,
It seems I'm invisible to you
How hard I loved you all day

I stand on this cliff
I closed my eyes
Starting to hold my breathe
I jumped and said goodbye.

Reviews

[Emily Greene]

This has a lot of potential to be a great piece! Your emotion definitely comes through but I would add some adjectives or figurative language because it's a little bare. That also may help it flow more smoothly.

[Hiroshi Masters]

Thank you so much. I will work more on this.. :)