Different

Different

A Poem by Rafif
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Take a sip of that cup.
Watchout, monster monster.
You never figured, but that monster
Would actually go like: "S'up."
Swallow it up.
Tear up that poster.
It's time you've moved on.
Because my job here is done.
Pull yourself outta that hole.
Stop hiding like a mole.
I've got the word "Regret." scraped in my skin.
I hopelessly stood still carrying that sin.
I've built all that upon myself.
I was supposed to break that shelf.
Life's not worth not one frown.
Flashes, I recall.
Make me drown.
I can see, it's my turn to fall.

© 2010 Rafif


Author's Note

Rafif
I've messed this up, but I think a part of it is worth reading.
Review please.

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yes, oh yes

Posted 13 Years Ago


beautiful. very nice writing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Can’t mess up, you write what comes to heart and that’s what poetry is all about. We all have our own styles that make us different; the beauty of poetry is in the eyes of the reader. So keep on writing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is good. I like it. Keep up the good work.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I really enjoyed reading this. Well done.

Love

Mamabear x

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like the rhyming in this. Well done!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I read your poem several times, it is almost as if you melded two works, one a warning, the other filled with regret. I like it, it is similar to exploring a crowded unfamilar place by the flashes of light from the lightning storm; a strobe effect.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I think there is a lot of depth in your wording and there are several meanings and messages that flow through read it twice, mary

Posted 13 Years Ago


Interesting how this one turned, and how it turned out as well. Nicely done. You may tweak it or add a few lines, but I would not delete anything.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I think it's really good. Shows great strength and lots of imagination.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on December 30, 2010
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