Burying 2020

Good riddance

We'll gather by your open grave
as bells echo out loud,
no tears or flowers be offered up
to fall upon your shroud.
For you my friend will not be missed
your leaving will be cheered,
though your memory will linger on
in most minds ever seared.
But hope comes with your burying,
a light at tunnels end,
with smiles replacing misery
as the world begins to mend...

Happy New year folks :))

Reviews

[Words of Wisdumb]

Hopefully it will all soon be a socially distant memory. Great job.

[Gee]

Thank you kindly

[Phill Oz O'fee]

The scars are deep - and as you poetically write - 2020 will NOT be seen as a pleasant one! Hopefully, 2021 will eventually bring healing... :-) Great share!

[Gee]

Thank you sir

[Laura Kate]

You're absolutely right. I don't think there are many people in the world who were sad to say goodbye to 2020. Your poem expressed this really nicely, and looks positively on to 2021. Happy New Year to you too! Laura.

[Gee]

Thank you Laura

[genocide]

Very good poem happy new year 2021

[Gee]

Cheers,. Hope you and yours have a safe and happy new year

[Thomas]

Nicely done with a good rhyme scheme and a sentiment I'm sure many of us share.

[Gee]

Thank you Thomas

[barleygirl]

Poignant & powerful, you express the bitterness many others show thru caustic humor. Given my lone wilderness lifestyle, I was not much affected by all the ways covid twisted lives around "out there" in the "real world" . . . but the one thing that has always been stuck in my craw is the covid death toll in the USA . . . will be 350,000 within a day or two . . . and hardly anyone ever mentions it. Kinda like how the national debt keeps going up-up-up & politicians hardly notice. It's hard to see this ending well. But luckily I'm old & I have no offspring! (does it get any more jaded than that?) We all feel as bitter as your poem sounds & I love the graveside imagery (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Gee]

Hi Margie. At present the town that I love in has the highest infection rates in the UK, nearly double all other hotspots. I am a fully paid up member of the super spreaders fraternity :))
Thank you m'dear

[Haley]

A sentiment that can be shared by many! A great little read. Here's to 2021!

[Gee]

Thank you. Happy new year

[light and ashes]

I couldn't have possibly said it any better myself. :)
I thoroughly enjoyed this. Happy New Years.

[Gee]

Thank you. Happy new year

[light and ashes]

You're welcome :) May it bring you many blessings.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha Gee, I’m so on board this train I’m hoping 2021 brings that mending we so desperately need. I really enjoyed reading your ode. Mahalo.

[Gee]

Thank you kindly. Happy new year

[rew]

Hi Gee
Yes, the content, of '' Burying 2020 '' will be applauded and, quite rightly,
but the grammar is atrocious but luckily in only two places
In the 2nd line you have an inversion, which is a childs way of speaking
'' as bells they echo loud ''
If that were written
'' as bells echo out loud ''
you'd loose nothing in meaning but you'd loose the inversion.

Also, if I may,
You have no need for the archaic
''e'er'' in the eighth line
It may be pleasing to write, an harking back to the seventeenth century posies but, it is in the middle of the twentieth century writing and as such is very jarring.
There's also an inversion in the third line but it is much less noticeable.
However, your audience, your reviewers, have echoed your thoughts
without mentioning these poetical '' faults ''
so perhaps I am merely being picky?

by the by I've only just noticed a '' ratings box ''
I don't know what it means but '' oyl give it foive ''
75

regards from rew

[Gee]

You be as picky as you like. Couple of changes made, thank you

[rew]

much obliged

[Gee]

It's nice to have an honest review that helps with the standard. Thank you