Why Can't They See

Why can't they see

How broke down I am?

Why can't they see

How dead I've become?

Why can't they see

Their words hurt me?

Why can't they see

They've made me break?

Why can't they see

How bad I need to talk?

Why can't they see

How bad I want to die?

Reviews

[Obscured by the Shadows]

The only reason they can't see is if they choose not to; those that can see just simply choose to either ignore it or revel in the beauty of another's pain. It is sad that we can't all just help each other.

Beautifully written, I am sorry if this is how you feel.

[Hope Rose]

Just sick of everyone's bullshit, for lack of a better word

[Obscured by the Shadows]

Nonsense? Idiocracy? Stupidity?

[Hope Rose]

Nah, bullshit fits perfectly

[Obscured by the Shadows]

You simply said for lack of a better word, so I gave some suggestions, but bullshit works just fine.

[Hope Rose]

I can't think of words that mean more than bullshit

[Obscured by the Shadows]

Excellent, wide vocabulary is good.

[Hope Rose]

I agree there

[Richard Mueller]

Repetition is a great way to get a point across in writing. Wonderfully written and I like the constant source of flow that you've put out

[Hope Rose]

I'm glad you like it

[Inject Positivity]

because they don't have a heart inside them as they are no more in the category of human being.... its a shame how people find happiness by making others unhappy.... keep moving on my frnd you deserve all the best things in the words.... i can feel your feelings here....

[Hope Rose]

thank you for this my friend. you have made my day

[Archos]

An apt interpretation of a feeling many of us are familiar with at some point. Nice job building the tension until the punchline, it leaves a sort of echo after you read the last line. Thanks for sharing.

[Hope Rose]

No problem, glad you liked it. Thanks for the review

[ms. barrie]

society has unfortunately become apathetic & opportunistic...
most only feel good about themselves when they are able to seek
out those who are emotionally vulnerable or just sensitive...
& projecting their inferiority complex onto other's. this is the only
way {pathetic} they can build themselves up. then onto the next.

once you realize the source of this, they should have our pity.
agree, this is beautifully written.
just keep writing this all out...and always believe in yourself.

[Hope Rose]

Thanks, for both the review and the advice. They both mean a lot

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome...been there & back again one too many
Times {like most}…never again (:

[ms. barrie]

...one more thing...it might help if you change your name...
to something you are interested in, or like. can change your mind set
and don't give her/him the power over you (easier said than done);
but it could be the first step (:

[Hope Rose]

I actually did this to make a friend of mine mad because she told me I was pretty lol There's no real feeling behind it

[ms. barrie]

p.s. just a suggestion................

[ms. barrie]

ah I see...no worries then

[Hope Rose]

Yup. None at all

[wordman]

people are cruel ! it comes from ignorance ,just like our s****y troll we have here
most are down on themselves so they lash out at other people,they think this makes
them superior when in reality it only shows how stupid they are

[Hope Rose]

Yeah, but this doesn't happen to me on here. It's always someone else, the same person at that, that makes me seriously want to kill myself

[wordman]

well i`m your friend !

[Hope Rose]

And I'm glad. I just... This person affects me differently than my friends do. I always take what he says hard

[wordman]

is it our troll your talking about,who gives a s**t ! only a dam idiot trolls
tell him what to kiss

[Hope Rose]

Nope, not our troll. Someone else. He's not a writer, he just like(d) reading my work when we were close. He's the reason behind my name

[wordman]

so a lost love,and why would you feel like you do over a lost love ! if he was the right one
it wouldn`t be gone

[Hope Rose]

Partial reason* Gods I hate my phone

And I know but it still sucks in a way because he left for a stupid reason and wouldn't let me explain

[wordman]

so you haven`t lost anything,look life in the eye,stand tall,your as good as anybody and better than most ! right !

[Hope Rose]

I guess. Not too sure of much nowadays

[wordman]

no ,no, we don`t guess ! that`s the way it is

[Hope Rose]

I can't do that. Idk why I just can't

[wordman]

only the strong survive,never lay down for anything

[Hope Rose]

You aren't the first to tell me that.

[wordman]

so why didn't you listen the first time ?

[Hope Rose]

i tried but everything just got worse. i couldnt handle it

[wordman]

well lets have a coke !! or a pepsi

[Hope Rose]

lmao yes!!! im so glad to know a guy who isnt telling me how fat i am and is instead doing exactly this

[Dani The Unreviewed]

They can see. that's the problem!
people have become monsters. some of them enjoy seeing others hurt. some wouldn't help you if you were attacked in front of their blind eyes. they're like "what do I care? " and simply walk away.

[Hope Rose]

I agree with that. I finally snapped today when I heard people talking

[Dani The Unreviewed]

kick em in the guts, then in the head, and walk away, like your job is done. then they'll think twice about messing with you.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

you can also tell em about the Hungarian devil, waiting for an opportunity to hurt people who hurt his friends .. :) or simply ask if they like hospital food. ;-)

[Hope Rose]

Lol true enough. But for the first one, I can't do that. I'm 5'1" so that's impossible for me to do to people like 10000000000000000000000 feet tall

[RJ]

who causing sh*t lolz I taller than you shortie

[Hope Rose]

ik rj and A lot of people. I'm not naming names here

[RJ]

message me

[Hope Rose]

K...... -_-