Heartbeat

Heartbeat

A Poem by Hope Rose
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Have some nonsense

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I loved her

She was too shy

I was an all star

She was a geek


I watched her

She saw me

I looked away

She felt alone


I was alone

She was taken

I felt so lonely

She didn’t feel right


I walked alone

She sat alone

I saw her

She couldn’t see


I watched her

She let herself break

I comforted her

She felt different


Rain started to fall

They went separate ways

All the while thinking

About the other


I did my homework

She stared at her piano

I couldn’t stop thinking

She couldn’t stop dreaming


About that time in the rain

Where there was silence

Except for the sound

Of their hopeful heartbeats

© 2016 Hope Rose


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Hi ^^ My first time reading your write and will be reading a few more of your writes in future.

I guess I will begin with the fact that there's nothing wrong going all color whammy but kinda distracts the eye while trying to read the lines properly. The structure's maintained well and there is a certain rhythm to the write. Your words invoke imagery, especially the verses in blue and I believe the highlight of the write. I like the way you have ended the poem with an alliteration.

The write is simple nothing complicated but I believe the way you mention pointers and examples that normally two people who like each other for a long time and have just never found the courage to open up and express their feelings goes through. Then again you have given it a hopeful ending that they might someday confess their love for each other. Many I believe can relate to this write in this manner.

I guess the only reason you must have tagged this as nonsense is because this was something you wrote when you were being silly (and not how you usually write your poetry??) and never really meant to achieve something like this or it even being viewed or reviewed ?? Again that is just my thinking. I could be way off.

Anyways it was a fun read. Thank you for sharing

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Érenn

8 Years Ago

Yeah I understand what you mean I would say you could have written this whole write in a refined m.. read more
FireKid

7 Years Ago

You may not have felt like this but tbh I have a feeling someone you know has.
Hope Rose

7 Years Ago

Maybe so, but who knows? I started writing this as a way of showing something I'm going through, and.. read more



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Beautiful just amazingly beautiful.

Posted 6 Years Ago


So beautiful... :) Great flow even though it isn't of the rhyming nature. I love it so much!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Hope Rose

7 Years Ago

Thanks I'm glad you like it
that is beautiful. I can actually see you using this for a story if you wanted.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hope Rose

7 Years Ago

You really think so?
LA.Kin

7 Years Ago

Yes. Beyond a doubt a very powerful piece of writing that can be used in various ways. I can see thi.. read more
Hope Rose

7 Years Ago

I like that idea...
Hi ^^ My first time reading your write and will be reading a few more of your writes in future.

I guess I will begin with the fact that there's nothing wrong going all color whammy but kinda distracts the eye while trying to read the lines properly. The structure's maintained well and there is a certain rhythm to the write. Your words invoke imagery, especially the verses in blue and I believe the highlight of the write. I like the way you have ended the poem with an alliteration.

The write is simple nothing complicated but I believe the way you mention pointers and examples that normally two people who like each other for a long time and have just never found the courage to open up and express their feelings goes through. Then again you have given it a hopeful ending that they might someday confess their love for each other. Many I believe can relate to this write in this manner.

I guess the only reason you must have tagged this as nonsense is because this was something you wrote when you were being silly (and not how you usually write your poetry??) and never really meant to achieve something like this or it even being viewed or reviewed ?? Again that is just my thinking. I could be way off.

Anyways it was a fun read. Thank you for sharing

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Érenn

8 Years Ago

Yeah I understand what you mean I would say you could have written this whole write in a refined m.. read more
FireKid

7 Years Ago

You may not have felt like this but tbh I have a feeling someone you know has.
Hope Rose

7 Years Ago

Maybe so, but who knows? I started writing this as a way of showing something I'm going through, and.. read more
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RJ
awe adorable!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hope Rose

8 Years Ago

yup it does
RJ

8 Years Ago

Grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr
Hope Rose

8 Years Ago

heheheheeheheheheheheeheheeh
Simply and beautifully written, as simple as it seems but it provokes some kind of a feeling a complicated overwhelming one!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Hope Rose

8 Years Ago

I'm glad you like it :)
Very well done, a thought provoking piece which shows all of your potential. I love the last stanza especially, the term "hopeful heartbeats" is especially good and really sticks in my mind. Keep up the great work!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Hope Rose

8 Years Ago

I'm so glad you like it! I was actually thinking of how to write a song when I wrote this and I gave.. read more

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