Darkness

Darkness

A Poem by HorrorMaster
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One of my old dark poem. I wrote this one because one of my ex girlfriend was being mean to me.

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I am in the chamber of darkness
The demons torture me with sadness
I see nothing but tears going down my face
They're taking me a way from this earth with out a trace
Everyday I feel nothing but insufferable pain
Even though its not the same
They came to take me a way
In this darkness I should stay

© 2010 HorrorMaster


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The work it takes to come up with a new way to inflict pain...day after day. Thats what gave me chills. This one was quite jarring.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Sad and creepy, especially the second line " The demons torture me with sadness"; you'd think they would be happy to be torturing a person. Great writing about the loss of someone being hateful to another.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Beautifully portrayed ..... shows your anger and frustration to break free.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Good write. With some slight word changes this can be a really good piece. Just reads 'mechanical' and for me that steals the true power that is hidden in this write.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I really love the imagery in this poem, and the rhyming scheme is awesome! Great write!

Posted 10 Years Ago


the definition of true darkness. great work!

Posted 10 Years Ago


thats almost exactly how I felt in the hospital when I had brain surgery. wicked poem dude.

Posted 10 Years Ago


It does feel that way sometimes... Nice job describing that dark emotion.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Very dark and eerie, kinda chilling. I hope its nothing more than feeling real down.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Hmmm i like it!!!!! but i would have prefered it without the note about the ex girlfriend, the poem would have had a darker nuance not knowin what it was about really.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Added on March 5, 2010
Last Updated on March 6, 2010
Tags: Depression

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HorrorMaster
HorrorMaster

Tamarac, FL



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Hello i'm Ira and i'm pretty much a horror writer. I have bad grammar and spelling or typos errors, but I tried my best, so please enjoy them. Also I don't like harsh grammar nazi saying (oh yo.. more..

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