Blood

My first haiku poem

Blood covered your body.

Death steals your soul.

Now you pass away.

Author's Note

I think I did it right lol, it's my first.

Reviews

[ur_ginger_girl]

thats awsome straight to the point

[Sean M. Addams]

very cool and straight to the point ..great job

[Shane Brooks]

that is the most brutal hiakou ever totally f****n rad

[Jae]

great poem. made me smile. but i dont think it was supposed to. oh well. but, im sorry to say that your syllables are a tad off. oh well, its still awsome.!!

~Rem

[Fran Marie]

A haiku consists of seventeen syllables ;you have only fifteen.. you need to add 2 more somewhere in a three line format.....with 5,7,5 being the common format great content however and most interesting

[The Master of Fright]

Good try, but the syllables are off. A Haiku is typically 5 syllables in the first line, 7 in the second, and 5 in the third. I think this poem needs to be revised to fix that mistake. However, I love the idea and premise. It's very hard to tell a story in 3 lines. I should know, as I have written many haikus. In that regard, it's fantastic, but it isn't a haiku.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Good job. I hate haiku's, but this one was fun. :)
Thanks for sharing. :)

[Matthew Kult]

Short and sweet. Well done.

[James Watts]

Short and gruesome.

[Senseless whatever]

Nice try.
Haiku sometimes described as 5, 7, 5 syllables. Traditional poems contain a season and a cutting reference.