A Poem by HorrorMaster

My first haiku poem


Blood covered your body.

Death steals your soul.

Now you pass away.

© 2010 HorrorMaster

Author's Note

I think I did it right lol, it's my first.

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thats awsome straight to the point

Posted 11 Years Ago

very cool and straight to the point ..great job

Posted 11 Years Ago

that is the most brutal hiakou ever totally f****n rad

Posted 11 Years Ago

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great poem. made me smile. but i dont think it was supposed to. oh well. but, im sorry to say that your syllables are a tad off. oh well, its still awsome.!!


Posted 11 Years Ago

A haiku consists of seventeen syllables ;you have only fifteen.. you need to add 2 more somewhere in a three line format.....with 5,7,5 being the common format great content however and most interesting

Posted 11 Years Ago

Good try, but the syllables are off. A Haiku is typically 5 syllables in the first line, 7 in the second, and 5 in the third. I think this poem needs to be revised to fix that mistake. However, I love the idea and premise. It's very hard to tell a story in 3 lines. I should know, as I have written many haikus. In that regard, it's fantastic, but it isn't a haiku.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Good job. I hate haiku's, but this one was fun. :)
Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago

Short and sweet. Well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Short and gruesome.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Nice try.
Haiku sometimes described as 5, 7, 5 syllables. Traditional poems contain a season and a cutting reference.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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Added on July 7, 2010
Last Updated on July 7, 2010



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Hello i'm Ira and i'm pretty much a horror writer. I have bad grammar and spelling or typos errors, but I tried my best, so please enjoy them. Also I don't like harsh grammar nazi saying (oh yo.. more..


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