Echoes of You

Echoes of You

A Poem by Relic

~Echoes of You~

Your ghost hides in corners of our wrinkled sheets
reaching out transparent hands to grasp at my foolishness.

I've never enjoyed swimming naked in guilt's sea - 
It leaves me dripping remorse.
It seems, death's formidable grip can trump a full hand 
of indifference every time.

The mundane, repetitious days of our existence
held me in perspective as one
too ambivalent to shake his disembodied shoulders. 

The scent of your demise to me seemed innocuous -
fleeting, and unable to bloom;

But, flowers - I've discovered - are fragile things 
that in a short period of time
will die from the slightest chill.

And I...unbelievably -
immersed in my neglectful, narrow corner -
unable to sympathize or relate to simple needs -
never noticed at all -
your petals -
falling one by one.

How often have men picked their flower in life only to ignore her later through the trials of marriage? Her tears like petals have fallen. Now, through her absence, he realizes too late, what he has done: Disregarded and Ignored his soul mate.

Your thoughts are always welcome.


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Author's Note

Relic
Note to self: Changed the picture and a couple of words.


A quick note:

~~This is by far my most popular poem. And yet, it didn't start that way. Many young people are offended by advice or suggestions from others. They feel insulted that someone would critique their writing.

As for me, I came here not just to share my writing but to learn as well. If it wasn't for suggestions from Rick Puetter and Girl Friday (see below) I don't think the poem would have been as good. The poet Richard also helped me fine tune the poem and it is now--after all these years--(in my mind) complete.

We can always learn from other people as long as we know they have more experience and know-how than us.~~

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Great work! I loved it! I:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Relic

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much.
 Soul Fire

11 Years Ago

You're welcome :) Great work! Awesome job!
Relic

11 Years Ago

:)
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What's not growing is dying. A love taken for granted is starving and you have captured it so well, dear poet.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Relic

11 Years Ago

I appreciate your review, thank you.
well painted,the head strong life leaves a lot in its wake ,the life of take, take,take.
now I am to late, late, late.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Relic

11 Years Ago

ha, Thank you very much for your thoughts.
Can I relate to this. I love the poetic way you've strung this together. I didn't find anything I didn't like about this.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Relic

11 Years Ago

Glad to hear that Doreen, thanks very much.
This is painful in thought and yet I know it to be true.. I've seen it happen far too often.. So many things come into play in relationships anymore it makes me not believe in it at all.. xo..

Posted 11 Years Ago


Relic

11 Years Ago

Relationships can be tough it's true. I've seen them disintegrate then mend, then the cycle repeats... read more
Truer words have not been spoken. I think many people can relate to taking things for granted. This particular situation, you put into a sad beauty of words. The imagery was beyond well done. Echoes indeed...

Posted 11 Years Ago


Relic

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Emily. This poem originally had 107 reviews on my old account!
Serenity Faith

11 Years Ago

I believe it! Don't worry, I'm positive it'll get back up there ^_^
Relic

11 Years Ago

:)
Once again your refreshing and vast talent with vocabulary and imagery stands out strong in this poem. Really beautiful piece.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Relic

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words Shea.
This is so beautiful

Posted 11 Years Ago


Relic

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much.
Speak in Silence

11 Years Ago

Your welcome :) anytime

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