Blue Skies! And Lies?

Blue Skies! And Lies?

A Poem by Chloe
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Global Warming and the direction of the developing future of society.

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Blue Skies! And Lies?

Smoke and fog
drift to the clouds
where they are combined
in a heavy shadow
to cover the world in
a blanket of self-pity;
of self-doubt

Children will be told
tales of a blue sky once existing
a sky that once enlightened lives
with its lemon drop sun
and trails of cotton candy clouds

Oh, the world was once warm
the sky was once a pearling blue
the grass was once green
and the children once laughed.

 

© 2008 Chloe


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the nostalgic feeling comes through really well.great job.

Posted 16 Years Ago


I like your writing style...though the content...well, let's just say I would have to debate with you on the "global warming" issue. But, I like your writing style and I thought it was very good.

Elise O'Haire

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A thoughtful piece. I like your descriptions of the sun and clouds, it gives a bright cartoonish feeling to your topic. A odd but intriguing mixture that seems to enhance rather than detract from your warning.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent word choice used throughout the piece. I like that you chose a topic out of the norm. A sad but important topic. I agree with Red_Queen, however... your title could be stronger. Again, excellent work and I hope you continue to write. Welcome to WC.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The only problem i have with it is the title.

it's a bit weak and come on now we know you can do better then that.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A Great piece really.

"Children will be told
tales of a blue sky once existing
a sky that once enlightened lives
with its lemon drop sun
and trails of cotton candy clouds"

Thats one of the best segments i have ever read congragulations.

xoxoxoxoxoxox

-Queenie-

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I thank you for writing about such an important and yet tragic topic. The vision you paint is one that has a ring of truth to it, and that scares me. I hope and i pray that people wake up and see just how important of an issue this really is...
Thank you for sharing! :)

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice choice of subject matter. Very heavy. Love you're description too. Especially "with its lemon drop sun
and trails of cotton candy clouds"

I want to live in that world.




Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

If there are any more children. :( Good poem. Sad topic.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Chloe
Chloe

Seattle, WA



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I am a 16-year-old young writer and I live in Seattle, Washington. I began writing when I was about nine. Then, I began to play some guitar and I realized that I had talent for music also. So poetry a.. more..

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