Balancing Straws "Unfinished pt2"

Balancing Straws "Unfinished pt2"

A Poem by ICE

A second version of Unfinished. Its very different from the first one


So here we are

Unyeilding and worn down

By the weight of this

Verbal gravity.

Traversign across this

Undying void

That holds no meaning.

So here we are

Waiting for a time

Where time is more that just

A clock on the wall

Counting down whats left

Of our lives.

So here we are

Trying to perfectly balance what life

Has given us

And the turmoil

That its drenched in.

So here we are

Understanding how hard it is

To say how we feel

When we feel nothing at all.

Trying not to fall apart at the


And failing miserably.

Here we are



Floating through

Time and space

Everything and nothing

Drowining in this

Whirlpool Of emotional


The chaos that fuels

my mind.

© 2009 ICE

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Posted 12 Years Ago

This is a wonderful poem. I love how the title totally portrays the flow of the poetry that follows. So here we are Understanding how hard it is To say how we feel When we feel nothing at all. This feels like something I have heard in my subconscious before. Such a wonderful body of art. One that really depicts some of the dying concerns we have as human beings. I love it! :)

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