Alas! An Eclipse Is Upon Us

Tired you say.

Tired of me?

Tired of living ?

Too tired to sleep...

Too tired to see,

That I'm hurting on the inside

By the words

You continue

To hold captive

Behind those

Beautiful lips.

Refusing to see

That you being with her

Scares me.

That after laying

Here beside you

You move...

Refusing to "BE"

At least only with me.

Sorry you say...

Sorry's not what you meant.

I sure as hell didn't say

That I forgive you

For starving me

Of the air

That I now inhale

As though it were the

Last time

I would be able to breathe again.

June 9th, 2009

Reviews

[Jason]

Breathtaking and flawless...., Ohh, the way you put yourself out there in this one...., especially in the end....
"Sorry you say...
Sorry's not what you meant.
I sure as hell didn't say
That I forgive you
For starving me
Of the air
That I now inhale
As though it were the
Last time
I would be able to breathe again"

What a powerful ending to yet another great reflection of your soul. Your words and metaphors are like a painted sky on an autumn night..., you just capture raw emotion at it's purest state and create such wonderful poetry. Like I said, one of my favs Ice!....Thank you again for sharing!

Jay

[run vs remember]

This is amazing. It doesn't let up a bit until the last line; it's perfect. Beautiful words.

[*~Poetic_Essence~*]

Very emotional poem...It is heartfelt because it can be related to most people...I love the beginning lines, how you flowed right into the heart of your poem then you expressed your feelings very clearly..I love that...I love the repetition of some words..Thank you for the read request i really enjoyed it...
Well From One Word-Player To The Next...Always Remember To Write With Your Heart!

[Thunderlyrics]

I am agreeing with the others. You truly reached inside yourself for the raw emotions and to let "her" know that all is NOT forgiven.

I was right there with you through each line!!
A work of art INDEED!!!!

[Kelley]

this was great Ice!!! Your going to go far someday ICE.
I loved your words.....

"I sure as hell didn't say
That I forgive you
For starving me
Of the air
That I now inhale"

Great poem in every way thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[visions of doom]

oh wow , what a sensational poem , my heart was breaking for you . you live by your passion , that is plainly obvious and give everything you have to the person you are with . people like you should be worshipped , not betrayed or hurt by thoughtless neglect . don't you dare give up gorgeous , your knight in shining armour is but a heartbeat away and this time i just know he's going to treasure the beautiful lady he is holding . you'll know who he is when he arrives , your heart will tell you . have faith princess ,
a very powerful read gorgeous , thanks so much for sharing .