Do Not Compare Me To a Summer's Day (Response to Shakespeare's Sonnet 18)

Do not compare me to a summer’s day.
I am not lovely nor am I worthy.
The winds that blow, I hope shall blow away

My youth, my looks, the very face you see.

The eye of heaven shows the truth within

This soul you praise and say forever shines.
I’m much too full of wrath, vengeance, and sin:
And yet you wish to say that you are mine?
Let me be winter winds; let me be snow.
Let me be ice that’s cold and sharp to touch:
For winter represents my cold, dark soul
That longs for death and hates this life so much.

     In your immortal words, I may just live,
     But love, for you, I have nothing to give.

Reviews

[Fabric Pulse]

"In your immortal words I may just live..." =]

[WynterPhoenix]

A brilliant take on Shakespeare. The flow is spot on and the wording is perfect. Though I enjoyed the original by Shakespeare, I'd have to say that your response is more my style. Great write!

[Lily Mae]

I think you did a wonderful job, the flow and content are perfect.. x

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Perfectly flowed and grammatically excellent, a valiant effort to cope with the king

[☯]

Beautifully written, and expressed. It also flowed smoothly. I loved the calmness in this poem. Wonderful read. :)

[Tasha]

This was beautiful IceDragon, I loved it.