Escape

     These emothions clawing at my skin. Voices moaning "Breath out. Breath in." I'm not sure I can take this anymore.  Whispering you love me so. Oh god, I wish you'd let me go. I'm not perfect, like you think that I should be. Sometimes I sit and cry. Hoping today will be the day I die. Is that normal? No, just my soul screaming to be set free. Little flowers in little rows. I'm still not sure how this goes. I have such trouble compartmentalizing my sins. Please let me go so that I can fade into nothingness or at least another place. And here is where I will end before I must begin.

 

 

Author's Note

I'm sure after reading this you will realize little or no talent shown here... I write because I must, not because I can.

Reviews

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Actually there is a lot of talent in that piece. I think if you were to break it into seperate lines, it was be fantastic. It's got the emotion and the imagery. And there is no set way of writing poetry.

Kudos!
Tara M Stone

[Twilight]

A nice piece of self-expression, and very emotional too! The lack of verses, almost helps. That's because it means there is no opportunity for the reader to take a pause, and reflect about what you are saying. In other words, no opportunity to reduce the intensity.

Overall, a few specific emotions seemed clear in this piece. I reckon that these include desperation, frustration and a desire to be free from the stresses of life. Of course, only the writer knows for sure! Either way, I quite enjoyed reading this. Looking forward to more, my fellow artist!

[Kelley]

emothions is spelled emotions
but besides that I would say you have
a lot of talent. Never put yourself down
on your writing.
You may think its crap but the world See's
a different side to it.
I thought this was dark and brooding, but thats my favorite
kind of writing. We all get depressed in life from time
to time, but who ever heard of a happy poet.

Keep up the great work and thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[Marlena]

That was great, I think the message is a little unclear in parts but I love that kind of thing. Lovely job! :)

[~barefoot empress~]

A softly sad expression of complete confusion. I love you sister.

[WildRose]

If thats having no talent I wish I had "no talent".

Great job!

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[Taylor H]

This wasnt bad at all! This was a lot like pose poetry. Which is a lot harder to do then normal poetry. This was great. Good job. And I do understand what you mean about (you write becaue you have to not because you can)

[Sarah Hawkinson]

I know what you mean by you have to write versus it being an option. And I think every true writer understands that passion. I believe there is much talent to be recognized here, good work!