Simple Pleasures

Simple Pleasures

We often believe we find happiness in many things,

People, possessions, places.....

But a new idea I do bring,

Perhaps look at things from someone else's pace?

You might not find happiness in algebra or math,

but doodling is a nice distraction.

Till your mother expresses her wrath,

And considers taking bold action.

You might not find happiness in being ill,

But perhaps something is happening, much bigger than you,

So have some soup, relax and take a pill,

Since God is in control, don't bother looking for a clue.

You might not find happiness in getting a new book,

But maybe someone cannot read,

And just wants one look,

They desire their imagination and inspiration to feed.

You might not find happiness in flipping on a lightswitch,

Or cranking up your heat,

But long ago, in days of old, when many were not rich,

Such people would consider this quite a treat.

You might not find happiness in opening your garage door,

And you wonder why I mention it at all,

But I can tell you that lifting one is quite a chore,

So be grateful while yours still stands tall.

You might not find happiness in an abandoned penny,

But, please, I beg you, pick it up,

For someone wishes for many,

But instead walks around with only an empty cup.

Author's Note

Hey, so I am considering entering this poem in a poetry contest, ANY kind of constructive or helpful advice would be greatly appreciated!

Reviews

[Jeremy Hiles]

Great job on this poem! I really like how you used so much imagery with your words to create a picture of all this going on inside the reader's mind! The only thing that stood out to me that seemed like it could be fixed was in the last stanza,

You might not find happiness in an abandoned penny,
But, please, I bet you, pick it up,
For someone wishes for many,
But instead walk around with only an empty cup.

Maybe you could change "I bet you" to "I beg you"? Unless there was a reason for saying "bet". And the last line there maybe change "walk" to "walks", unless you are referring to there being many people walking around.

Otherwise, great job! I really enjoyed reading it! Keep up the great work!

[Kimberly Miller]

Thank you for the review! Oh geez, how did I ever miss those spelling errors?! Well, thank you for pointing those out!

[Jeremy Hiles]

You are welcome! Haha, don't feel bad, everyone misses something now and then! No problem! I see that you made some changes, great job!