Rain

Rain

A Poem by Awaken the Sleepwalker
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White lies...

"
It's sprinkling now
Nothing is hurt from the drizzle
As it only benefits you,
the flower

It's a torent now
Tiny rivers flow through the grass
And with that you begin to choke,
the flower

A hurricane now
It has grown so out of control
You drown in what you rely on
The lier

© 2010 Awaken the Sleepwalker


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J.M
Oh wow - this is in fact a very powerful and effective poem. I love the structure; with it being the same for the first two verses but slightly different for the last e.g. The flower, the flower, the lier. This makes it very effective. It is also quite a dramatic poem, with drama building through it. Well done!

Posted 14 Years Ago


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J.M
Oh wow - this is in fact a very powerful and effective poem. I love the structure; with it being the same for the first two verses but slightly different for the last e.g. The flower, the flower, the lier. This makes it very effective. It is also quite a dramatic poem, with drama building through it. Well done!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Awaken the Sleepwalker
Awaken the Sleepwalker

Boonsboro, MD



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I'm a sophomore in college, and I'm an English major, aspiring to be a high school English teacher. I'd love to use that at an outlet for my writing as well. I've been writing for a while, and I've ha.. more..

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