Midnight Seductor

Yes, I'm obsessed... Now i just need to find a midnight seductor... anyone know one or want to be him??

 

Fangs glisten in moonlight

My body lusts so

I feel I'm to combust

The Yearning is too strong,

To feel him thrust

Oh how I lust...

I Follow my seductor

His eyes seem to glow,

Moonlight hits him just right

I'm paralyzed in fright

He smells my fear

Laughs in his head

Just hoping he can seduce me

Right into his bed.

I soon turn away

Begin to stray...

He stalks me in an instant

For I am his prey,

Yearning for a taste

Yet he doesn't want to take haste

I start to run

He thinks to himself

The fun has just begun...

Reviews

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Ooh, what a fantastic poem. I love it and the flow and rhyme are awesome. Terrific write!!!

Heather

[Wolfwind Words]

I loved this! It exploded with powerful emotions of hunger and fear. I could hear the the fanged one, chuckling as the other tries to run. A path that will only lead to a succulent taste and a hot life giving drink.

Great images poured into this piece!

Another wonderful creation!

Aaron

[Angelic Darkness]

This is wickedly suspenseful. The rhyming has a good flow to
it. AD

[Afayah]

i love this! the transitioning is wonderful and you have the moonlight that i am missing in my own poem. lol! very good!

[Chaos]

I like the flow and feel of this poem. I loved the seduction and lust and plain evil of this piece. Your rhymes are easy, but I thin you could re-'vamp' them if you try. I love the piece.

Thank you for sharing.

[Moonblade]

Incredible as usual. I truly love your vampire poems. I have to agree with a previous reviewer, it is very playful, and I think it really adds something to the piece. Fantastic. We want more.

[An owl on the moon]

Incredible! So darkly playful, as the chase begins! The phrasing, the font, the fangs... Everything is done to perfection... Well done!!!

Craig

[Legion]

It has, hasn't it. ;) Like it, though delve into the rhyme a little deeper. Try to stay away from the typical and mundane. It is working for you, but I think you could do even better if you stretch yourself a bit.