Nature concured this time

Nature concured this time

A Poem by Ina

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At her age of eighty five

it is a miracle to all

The fact that she is still alive

As  every week she  risks a fall

Thursdays she hangs out of her bedroom window,

to clean the outside of the glass

She has not fallen down yet, good for her

though a few times yes, she almost has

We all wait  for  disaster to occur

And today one seagull made  her work in vain

As he relieved himself  above  the windowpane

 

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© 2011 Ina


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The title vs. content matter is pretty funny...

Um... stylistic; you could put a comma before the yes... and vane should be vain?

This is really good though, short, punchy, and comical.

If you could check out a poem I wrote, that'd be great. Thanks a bunch and nice job.

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Ina
Thank you very much.
The comma was placed behind 'yes 'to emphazise the word a bit, if that makes sense.

Posted 10 Years Ago


The title vs. content matter is pretty funny...

Um... stylistic; you could put a comma before the yes... and vane should be vain?

This is really good though, short, punchy, and comical.

If you could check out a poem I wrote, that'd be great. Thanks a bunch and nice job.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Terschelling, Friesland, Netherlands



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