Alone

i have just expressed my loneliness thrugh this poem

here i am lone,

feeling so alone ,

sitting at the last seat of bus, 

and sprinkling out all the dust.

no one came to see by ,

i had a feeling to die,

i just wandered my eyes where,

no one was alone there.

i was left out from everything,

nor did the stars came by to sing,

i just wished  that if i had a pair of wings,

i would vanish from here with a blink.

now i m thinking of past,

where nothing was peace at last,

if god would have helped me then,

i wouldnt have been so alone then.

but then a thought ran in my mind,

i m the lone one guilty here,

cause I wasn't able to find,

a single friend to remove my fear

Author's Note

please ignore grammer problems and do tell your honest opinion

Reviews

[Mark]

I think you are brave for structuring a rhyme in English. Despite the grammar problems, I enjoyed this poem because you give it strength in the end: The realization that this loneliness does not make you a victim, but the cause.... and although it points a finger at you as the reason for the loneliness, it also empowers you as the only person who can do something about it!

[Inder24]

Thanks for the review !! it means a lot !! :) . yep we are only responsible for our own deeds !!

[Prritiy]

a poem which many would be able to relate to, a poem showing how important friends are. liked it.

[Inder24]

Thanks :)

[Prritiy]

welcome :)

[Eve Marie]

This poem is very personal and I love it!

[Inder24]

It sure is !!

[Ency Bearis]

Now maybe you'd found friends already or might be here in this site. This poem is a well versed thoughts deep inside of you how important the friendship is. Good one and nicely rendered with rhyme scheme.

[Inder24]

yep , I am now having friends in good strength ! :D n thanks for the review

[Ency Bearis]

YOU'RE WELCOME

[CriticalxxAngel]

I really liked how personal the poem was and how clear the points were made, I thought that the emotions really shown through and that this poem can be really relatable to others. Good Job

[Inder24]

thank you :)

[Chelle]

Ah, the expression of emotion in this poem is clearly seen here. My favorite stanza is the last one because it's the conclusion to your loneliness and depression depicted in the poem. I also liked how you set a scene and you described your desires to fly away from the solitude. To me, this poem has a deep meaning to it. Good job.

[Inder24]

Thank you :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Don't be afraid to have a friend. Try to have at least one. Who knows, if you get used to it, then probably you can have more. Winning friends is like gaining the biggest prize ever. :)

[Inder24]

thanks dhaye! , actually i had written this poem 5 years ago.. and at that time i was always alone !!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Ah, okay. I'm happy for you. :)

[Inder24]

:)