Old Age

Old Age

A Poem by Inder24
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This is a poem described through the yes of a 80+ man

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Strolling my way to the shore
I couldn't have asked for anything more
The sun was bright and the breeze grew cold
I cursed myself for growing too old

Nor could I run towards sea
Neither I could jump and touch the sky
Seeing the other playing by 
I always have some disappointment in my life

So we know what they say is true
What goes around comes back to you
I want to be young at heart and fly by
But this body of mine always reminds me to die

I started to curse god for what he has done
Why was he an immortal, while I am an octogenarian
Why can't he understand the pain that we felt
Why do people have to die now and then 

But then a thought came across my mind
If god is doing something,then he must be doing it for right
keeping my blind faith at his side
I went on to enjoy the rest of my life :D

© 2014 Inder24


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Inder24
ignore grammar problem and do tell your view about this poemm

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The impending mortality threatens our delicate lives. We are diagnosed with a terminal illness when we are born finite beings. The first four stanzas depict human fear. Frankly, it was my favorite part because the speaker is candid about his fears; it is not composed of some sort of transcendent enlightenment.

"Old Age" includes an abrupt sense of acceptance: "I went on to enjoy the rest of my life." I feel that it was too sudden, and it was not as honest as the rest of the poem. "Blind faith" gives off negative connatations. God appears to be used as a crutch in the final stanza. Acceptance becomes your reality through self-actualization and faith, not blind faith.

Overall, I enjoyed this read; its premise gives the youth a preview of what we have to look forward to.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Inder24

7 Years Ago

Actually I have just shown our fate in the last stanza . It doesnt matter how much we try to have a .. read more



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The impending mortality threatens our delicate lives. We are diagnosed with a terminal illness when we are born finite beings. The first four stanzas depict human fear. Frankly, it was my favorite part because the speaker is candid about his fears; it is not composed of some sort of transcendent enlightenment.

"Old Age" includes an abrupt sense of acceptance: "I went on to enjoy the rest of my life." I feel that it was too sudden, and it was not as honest as the rest of the poem. "Blind faith" gives off negative connatations. God appears to be used as a crutch in the final stanza. Acceptance becomes your reality through self-actualization and faith, not blind faith.

Overall, I enjoyed this read; its premise gives the youth a preview of what we have to look forward to.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Inder24

7 Years Ago

Actually I have just shown our fate in the last stanza . It doesnt matter how much we try to have a .. read more

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Added on March 6, 2014
Last Updated on March 6, 2014
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Inder24
Inder24

Ahmedabad, India



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well, i usualy write songs and poem when i m depressed or sad more..

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