ENTROPY OF MY MIND

Hey guys, I wrote the below piece of poetry when I was confused and depressed due to some personal problems.

I am lost inside the winds of this ratrace.
I want break.
I want break.

Sometimes, I think I am still lost in this ratrace.
I want break.
I want break.

Writing, Programming, Sketching all I love but then I think I love science too.

I am an introvert,
this life is very difficult.

Want to rule,
but hate to rule.

Love, hatred, goals and friendships all will end one day,
Except a guilt that made you end them that day.

I wish, I could do all I want to do someday,
but the failure of success holds me back everyday.

-Infinitygrl

Author's Note

I hope you liked it.
Don't forget to review it :)
Thanks!

Reviews

[Vari]

You remind me of the time when I was back in school days thinking all these and even today in my graduation time. Glad that I came across something intriguing. When we cling to a thought or follow its track, we find our thought in mid of coming future and present. Ty for writing, at least I can recollect my self into those unforgettable time. Have a wonderful day ahead Riya :).

[Riya]

Your welcome and thank you so much for sharing your views . It feels great when your poetry is relatable to the readers. You too have a productive and cheerful day ahead :)

[Summer boy]

The title... I expected something which increases with time (entropy?). Entropy wasn't the right word there to use. It is far far far different from complexity or randomness as it is confused. But then, you've mentioned instances which increase with, and comes in as the life ages. So it stands.

But since you've mentioned your state in the description, it still connects with the poem. Words are just our conventions.

First two stanzas were personal to me. I can see them. And we do wonder which one of them is the real truth. I always think it is the first one, which crystally implies the second one. Chuckles while writing, but both are truth.

Arts, Programming and Science... I see you are a student, but what they don't teach (and should teach) in schools is all these subjects, every single subject is interwoven. You might skip parts of it, to keep it as a different discipline, but when you trace that back down in history, it is obvious. And then you can see it right in your world. That what books of different subjects contain, is this one world.

That fourth stanza made me smile. Every life is very difficult. With a poetic spectacles, using a comma is brilliant. You're playing with the reader.

And then the next stanza was an easily mistaken obvious truth. But you didn't do any mistake. I have to see for those many people around me, and it is not fun. But it is something I still want to do, just because I like them, just because I want to.

The next one's a direct statement to entropy! And also another personal favorite.

You concluded with pure brilliance. Failure of success? Yes. You understand it well. With time, it is.. losing, and letting no one in. This is horror.
Success comes with time, and so this happens. This world is a chaotic one (the chaotic in chaos theory). And the only way we get it under our control is when we treat it as a complexity problem, after which it depends on how much nodes we're considering...which is how much data we have about the problem. The more we learn, the better we are at solving them.
Yes, it is hard, and it is our world.

In my favorites for sure.

[Riya]

Thank you so much for feeling my poetry and reviewing it in detail. I am happy to know that you loved my work. Thank you :) again for sharing your words.

[Aradhana]

Well being a science student is not easy!!!!! One feels of giving up at times but remember the things that hold us back are the ones that provide us strength!! and about entropy.......lives of science student is the highest limit of entropy!! chill everything will turn out to be good, better and best...just don't let anything disturb your equilibrium! Keep writing the stress down! :))

[Riya]

Thank you. Your so true and thanks for your inspirational words .But whatever it is, being science student is my choice and i love it.
Yeah I do write whenever i feel low or when something seems exciting to me :)

[Aradhana]

taking science is always a choice dear...coz who don't choose it wholeheartedly will never succeed and its fun to discover, imagine scribble head when nothing fits in there, also the joy...science is magic with proof..and world is nothing without science.

[Riya]

True. Science is essential for the growth of our species and because of it we are alive here.
There's so much to say about this subject and I liked it that you are also interested in it :)

[Aradhana]

Well i was interested in science more than it was in me..that is why it never comes to me😂😂

[Riya]

Well ok 😅

[Ankita Dwivedi]

that was really relatable and beautiful .We are so much at the same time ad nothing sometimes .There is no date of success , but passion surely one day leads to it .Along with hard work .Drop by sometime on my page .
well penned.
Ankita:)

[Riya]

Thanks very much :)
Welcome to Writerscafe. I also joined this website only few months before and now enjoying.

[Coyote Poetry]

Life is trial and error. We will fail more than we will succeed.
"I wish, I could do all I want to do someday,
but the failure of success holds me back everyday"
I know the above lines and we go forward always and hope for a positive ending. Thank you Riya for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Riya]

Yes life is all about having experiences and learning from them. But there are times when we don't understand this and flow with the emotions. We should need to try to be neutral in all situations. It seems to be easy but it is not.
Thanks for sharing your review:)

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree dear Riya and you are welcome.

[barleygirl]

Now THIS is what I'm talking about! I reviewed two of your poems that sounded way too general & simplistic for real life . . . this poem is the opposite of all that. This poem shows us what it feels like to be a real human being with real complex problems that are difficult to face, hard to solve, & which look different every time we look at them. This is how it feels to be REAL. This is real writing from the heart. I love it. Keep doing more of this! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Riya]

Thank you ma'am for letting me know my mistakes and i will try to improve them. Again lots of thanks for your review :-)

[Riya]

Thank you ma'am for letting me know my mistakes and i will try to improve them. Again lots of thanks for your review :-)

[Beavo]

It takes time to learn how to live life Infinitygrl, keep writing it will help you get there! :-)

[Riya]

Thank you sir for good wishes :)

[Chris]

Entropy - an interesting word choice. It denotes the unused portions of whom we are.

Detailing an existence while being PART of it can be daunting ...hence rat race is a fair depiction. Little control, causality perceptions, waiting in endless and vacant-eyed lines. Eating is not an easy habit... but IS a necessary one. It isn't hard (most times) doing what we like, but making a living while we DO - that is the rub.

[Riya]

Thank you sir for your kind review and you are true "making a living while we do what we love is not easy". But, when we do what we love then we are self satisfied with our lives and everything seems clear.

[msharma]

An honest writing.As it is said" every cloud has a silver lining"' the only thing in this world is to stand and uphold rightly your actions. Beautiful penning.

[Riya]

Thank you ma'am :)