Savage

Lust,cat and mouse game

Savage

 

How long will this circling each other like cannibals last?

All of our limitations and morals is chained to the past.

 

Our body temperature is a raging 103.

Captured, taunted by flames so sinfully.

 

Silent pleading, begging eyes.

Sweat drenched thoughts, fornicated sighs.

 

Dying of thirst, at the mercy of lust.

End it now with a pounce of passion, and a scorching thrust.

Author's Note

Was inspired by a forbidden crush

Reviews

[Eagle Cruagh]

The style , the type, the words mean nothing,
What makes this was the strong feeling , the little
death that you install here along with some slight
madness and you have created a masterpiece.
You have installed your charisma with this piece
and in so doiing you have created greatness.

[Eagle Cruagh]

Exciting , arousing and yes,
savage. The sweating , circling
each other brings the reader to
the edge of our seat. Our breathing
quickens with the characters, the
tension mounts until ---------------
its done.
----- John

[Dream Weaver]

An excellent piece of sensual poetic s...

[Brittany W]

You did a great job at keeping the rhyming throughout and it was great imagery, nice job.

[Moflo]

Great wordplay and great rhymes, the flow works very well, I do like that you extened the final couplet by a few syllables, it makes the poem less than predictable. Pacing is perfect. Good job.

[TheElfPrincess]

Short yet powerful and well written. I liked it. A bit sad at the end, yet beautiful.