Soul Cleanse

Honestly, I have no tether at all to this poem. I must've dipped into someone else's stream when I captured it.

My wish is a knife

to tear a hole in a star

and bleed it.

With its blinding energy

glistening hot and cleansing

I'd wash my soul free of you.

Reviews

[Perkele.7885]

I like the imagery though it sounds like a very hot thing to do, this cleansing. I think I would look for a more moderate star, a star that was petering out or dying. A good write, none the less.

[Baby Ricochet]

This is a stroke of bloody brilliance! It's very deep and very male. Outstanding work Mark

[Mark]

Thanks Mark, means a lot coming from you!

[TL Boehm]

Where is that stream. I want my toes in it. this is poetry gravid with emotion and depth.

[Mark]

Thanks much TL

[Stanley Wilson]

Mmmmm interesting now I understand why people write little works it had the same effect if not more than a long one.

[Ruth]

Excellent piece, concise and to the point in twisted metaphor :)

[Mark]

Thank you dear Poppy!

[lee von cleef]

I like *&(&^%^$ing poem Mark, it is so hard to strip the stains of others lives on us off ,But you have done it here .

[Mark]

Thank you so much Lee. So glad you got something out of it.

[Chris]

THAT is a strong thought-full piece...intense.

[Mark]

Thank you sir!

[Angi]

This piece is so good, Mark! The power in a blinding star, bled out. She must have some hold...

[Mark]

Thanks Angi, glad you like it.

[pupz333]

Simply said but with meaning.

[Mark]

thank you very much :)

[The Verse: A Poetry Jou..]

What a shame, its really good. It creates so many possible interps. The use of metaphor and the need to purge the sin, is all I get. (self-cutting) but I see you are a rather positive confessional poet,so...

[Mark]

Somewhere it changed... the concept I'd had originally was using the star's 'milk' to purge this person of his body, but it came out like this. Sometimes I have no control!

[The Verse: A Poetry Journal]

Oh, better. I think the best poets never did have control!