Foggy afternoon

Foggy afternoon

A Poem by Intothemilkyway
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Entry for a contest

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Into a foggy afternoon 
A warm sun ray falls down my window 
And my room lights up 
I feel tired but i see a red light in the middle
It makes me feel loved and calm 
In my big  fluffy sweater 
And suddenly it's cold
I feel my cheeks warm up just like a rose
But everything disappears and it leaves just the gray fog
Full of humidity and color gray just like sadness 
Just like me, 
Just like a bad rainy day
But then..
Here comes the sun. 

© 2020 Intothemilkyway


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Gray is a sad colour in my opinion, but it also has serenity and calmness about it. Everything red, just shouts out warmth and love. Then the sun. When you see that my friend, those golden rays and feel their presence too, then you are blessed.

Chris

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Intothemilkyway

3 Years Ago

Indeed Anne. You are right about it. Those rays are full of hope. Love seeing them.



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Sometimes a mood can strike in a fleeting way . . . brightening up a moment, then disappearing, only to show up later. It's intriguing the way you depict the fickle nature of the mind with strong fresh imagery & everyday contrasts, like feeling tired, but also loved & calm. These are the jagged ways thoughts & feelings bounce along. Nicely spontaneous & realistic (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Years Ago


Intothemilkyway

3 Years Ago

Yes this counts even in autumn. Really weird weather
What a a fluent and colourful use of Helena's suggested ten words! Your phrases are as warm and promising as that sun" Good luck with the contest. Keep safe, take care.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Intothemilkyway

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your kind review 😍 I loved it.
Gray is a sad colour in my opinion, but it also has serenity and calmness about it. Everything red, just shouts out warmth and love. Then the sun. When you see that my friend, those golden rays and feel their presence too, then you are blessed.

Chris

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Intothemilkyway

3 Years Ago

Indeed Anne. You are right about it. Those rays are full of hope. Love seeing them.

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