A beautiful song

A beautiful song

A Poem by Island Hippy

he sat, giddy and nervous 
in a small room 
painted duck egg blue
his knee bouncing 
driving her nuts 

she can't have been 
more than 21, maybe...
but she emanated 
this comforting warmth
that set me at ease 

I lay there quietly
while he talked and talked 
knee still bouncing 
I put out a hand to still him
then quiet... a smile and nod

she spoke very good English
littered with island slang 
and then the room filled 
with the most beautiful 
beating sound...badum, badum

then laughter, his nervous 
laughter, my watery smile
hands interlocked, and 
eyes fixed upon a tiny bean
singing a beautiful song.


© 2017 Island Hippy


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A precious heartbeat "badum, badum"-the song of new life so tenderly described. Your vivid imagery depicts this delicate, intimate moment so beautifully- "eyes fixed upon a tiny bean..singing a beautiful song."-unforgettable line. Love this!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Island Hippy

2 Years Ago

I aloha your beautiful words. Hearing the heartbeat for the first time is unforgettable xx
"and then the room filled
with the most beautiful
beating sound...badum, badum"

It's funny how some songs forever remind us of a certain person.. You write with an excellent imagery to go along with emotions.
I enjoyed reading this. 😊


Posted 2 Years Ago


Island Hippy

2 Years Ago

Mahalo YumnaKay I appreciate your kind words.
Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

You're welcome. Always a pleasure reading good works 😊
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b.
i enjoy visual writes, & this one is wrought with serenity for the heart. there's a sense of calmness, that warms the heart like milk and honey ...

this is a beautifully written gem -- thank you for sharing
- x

Posted 2 Years Ago


Island Hippy

2 Years Ago

Mahalo again for your beautiful words. I appreciate your time.
b.

2 Years Ago

you're most welcome ♡
that was beautiful, I just liked it. hahah that's all I can say, what a pretty poem.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Island Hippy

2 Years Ago

Mahalo Alicia, that very nice of you to say I appreciate it.
A beautiful vision create by your words. Beautiful place and song. A utopia for the lucky. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


Island Hippy

2 Years Ago

Aloha Coyote, thank you very much I appreciate your comment. Izzy
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

I did enjoy Izzy and you are welcome.
'...duck egg blue" ...great visual and mood set ;) i was sure it is mom and dad and newborn in the room ..so your closing surprised me and made me re- read a couple times ..wonderful story ...well said ..i am in the room with everyone .. the tiny singing bean will just have to mystify me ..but i am happy with my imagination sparked in a childlike way .. enjoyed reading :)
E.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Island Hippy

2 Years Ago

Aloha, thank you for your lovely review. It was our first scan and hearing our little ones heart bea.. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

aha! so i got it right...just confused the singer ;) congrats and the best of fortunes to you guys ... read more
Like poetry that sets the scene, inviting you in.
Lovely awkwardness to it, we can all relate to.
The start of a journey, which hopefully continues.
Got a feeling the sun is shining down on you, hope so.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Island Hippy

2 Years Ago

Mahalo Paul, a journey my husband and I are delighted to be on. The sun is definitely shining.
Paul Bell

2 Years Ago

Long may it continue.
'.. .. put out a hand to still him ~ then quiet... a smile and nod ~ ~ ~ she spoke very good English ~
littered with island slang .. '

What a fine alternating viewpoint to the 'play'. It's wonderful! You've slowly and surely created a sweet place with colours and movement that lead to a truly magical end.. or beginning.. both! The tale behind your words is - for me, beautifully different. .

Posted 2 Years Ago


Island Hippy

2 Years Ago

That's a humbling compliment, I very much appreciate your words. Mahalo Nui Loa emmajoy. Izzy
emmajoy

2 Years Ago

Smiling, and smiling again.
A hearts beat is the most beautiful song, isn't it. Even imagining hearing it right now brings a sense of warmth and comfort.
A great piece with a really good tempo, (or should that be beat?), building into the finale.....only to realise that those first beats are only track one on a very long album ahead :)
Nicely captured.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Island Hippy

2 Years Ago

Mahalo Nui Nemo we are looking forward to all the moments, what a lovely review. Izzy
Lorry

2 Years Ago

You're welcome :)

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Island Hippy

Maui, Hawai’i



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Kalani & Skipper’ mom, I visit the cafe and write occasionally in between all the mom stuff. Mahalo. more..

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