Butterfly Wings

 

 

a life within me

but never born

she is golden sunlight

dancing on a daisy

she is butterfly wings

gracing her mother's garden

I never saw her face

nor held her in my arms

but I dream her smiles

and hear her laughter

between wakeful moments

on moonlit nights

when a part of me

still feels her deep within

and forgets the emptiness

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Graphic credit: Google Images

Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Please don't think that I say this lightly or in jest; but this is, hands down, the absolute best poem that I have EVER read regarding a mother's feelings toward her miscarried child. Each word, each line glimmered like the sun bursting forth on a rainy day. You captured the sadness; but overwhelmingly, you captured the love that, captured for a moment, can outshine a thousand lifetimes of sadness.

I don't doubt for a moment that this really happened to you, as the words are from your heart. I can feel the heartbeat and the pulse of life within.

A dear friend of mine just suffered the same loss. I am so sorry for yours, but I have so say that she left such a memorable touch on your heart that it gave life to a beautiful, beautiful poem.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you from the bottom of my heart for your very gracious review, Linda. I appreciate your words more than I can say.

[Pete A...]

Yes I agree Linda ,quite the Write ...thinking it one o the nicest reads ive had ever had the pleasure of readin ...

[Anahat]

Wow...this was Incredible...
Beautiful just beautiful :)
Cheers!
-Love Anahat :)

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you so much for your very nice words, Anahat. You have made my evening very bright.

[Anahat]

Pleasure dear :)

[Ma'at]

this is amazing. you spoke of a absolutely terrifying incident that happens to so many people sadly in the most tranquil and beautiful way. i admire this piece and the way you write so much. the imagery and pure beauty in this piece is incredible.

[Joyce S. Greene]

You will certainly turn my head with your very nice words, GS. I appreciate your reading and reviewing my work a lot. My time on WC is very limited due to work and other time eaters, but it is nice to meet you and I wish you the best of luck with your writing.

[Fire Mage Andrea]

Really moving. It is a gentle poem that seems to soothe the pain of losing a child before they had the chance to experience life outside your body. My mum would be able to relate to this poem, as like other mums who have had the same thing happen to them.
The sentences/phrases are beautiful.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you for your very kind review, Fire. It makes me feel warm inside. I hope you have a very nice evening. Joyce

[Shaun Payton]

That took the breath away and I admit a bit teary eyed. Its like a cocoon around sorrow. Im at a loss for any other words.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Shaun, for your very nice thoughts. I truly appreciate them.

[Shaun Payton]

You are most welcome Joyce.🌹

[Madison O'Dwyer]

Wow, this was so beautiful. I loved your imagery, and how you used few words to create so many beautiful picturesque scenes and emotions. Thank you so much for sharing

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Madison, for such a wonderful review. You have brought a smile to my face.

[POETIC SOUL 2013]

you have a wonderful Delightful piece here, its flow and elegance is simply remarkable. excellent write!

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thanks for a very nice review, Jordan. I appreciate hearing your thoughts a lot.

[Adam Whitworth]

wonderful writing here joyce, real poetry

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Adam. Your review makes me smile.

[Ezekiel Silver]

A compelling piece with superb emotion.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Ezekiel, for your very gracious review. It means a lot to me.

[writ rajat]

i think the butterfly you write about is you who write beautiful than butterfly

[Joyce S. Greene]

What a wonderful thing to say, writ. You have made me smile, and I thank you very much.