Sonnet 3

Sonnet 3

A Poem by Jeremy Baker

My lustful love for you, beguiling all,

Tarpeia, the Queen of contradiction.

Tarnish desire, to bring about my fall:

and prove again pure love is pure fiction.

A glass, a vat, of wine to toast your crown,

you love your lies, your truth is so abstruse.

A virgin queen you shall remain alone;

not one can pass; their charms are of no use.

 

And yet I still shall seek your hand to wed,

although I know the darkness in your heart.

Though men pursue you only to your bed,

you ne’er were hit by wing’ed Cupid’s dart.

A Vestal Virgin never made good wife;

so why, good men, accept unruly strife?

© 2016 Jeremy Baker


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Another sonnet? You are on a roll, JB. I really enjoyed reading this. And iambic pentameter as well! The rhythm is outstanding and, as always, you display that knack for putting the right word in the right place. We have all known a Tarpeia - the mix of cynicism and romantic thought actually works a treat. Well done!

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i liked it! very sensual. very good.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This reminds me a lot of the Shakespearean sonnets, especially 147. The object of the poem sounds like a beautiful woman who bewitches men, figuratively or literally, into falling in love with her.' And yet I still shall seek your hand to wed,
although I know the darkness in your heart.' These lines are truly stunning, and I feel they encapsulate the premise of the poem. The longing here is just so powerful, and like much of Shakespeare's poetry, this is very relatable.

Posted 8 Years Ago


nice write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Really nice, i like how you wrote this, these lines are great, i like these ones:
"A virgin queen you shall remain alone;
not one can pass; their charms are of no use."
...
"And yet I still shall seek your hand to wed,
although I know the darkness in your heart."
... really nice written and said, i enjoyed this.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Brilliant. Like a man begging for a modern-day virgin.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is really beautiful! Well done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jeremy, I love the way you used the words, very creative and talented work!

Posted 8 Years Ago


very creative,
a nice way of putting something


Posted 8 Years Ago


Another sonnet? You are on a roll, JB. I really enjoyed reading this. And iambic pentameter as well! The rhythm is outstanding and, as always, you display that knack for putting the right word in the right place. We have all known a Tarpeia - the mix of cynicism and romantic thought actually works a treat. Well done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Interesting...lustful love and Queen of all contradiction...like how you've done that. I'm struggling a little to make the connection between what you've written and Tarpeia, perhaps she's symbolic of betrayal or duplicity? Nice write nonetheless. I like the line 'prove that pure love is just pure fiction' in particular.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Jeremy Baker
Jeremy Baker

Busselton, South West, Australia



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I'm a former English & Literature teacher who has always enjoyed the magic, power and simple romance of words well written. My favourite writers include Pablo Neruda, Liam O'Flaherty, Anthony Eaton.. more..

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