Doodle on a rainy Day

 

  

Doodles on a Rainy Day

 

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out may spring a minotaur

or wielded, glimmering scimitar,

even a fast track racing car;

or, - anticlimax - me!

 

Let’s check our poem carefully.

Look for things we did not see

first time round, and then agree

it’s really very, very twee.

The third line’s a disaster.

 

Think hard, and long – constructively.

If people read our poetry,

do we want them just to see

our careless inability

and press delete?

 

Rather, far more to our credit,

surely we’ll with great care edit;

line five – we can’t believe we said it,

it has no scansion, rhyme or merit.

Chuck it in the bin.

 

Examining the punctuation

we carefully, with consternation

see this current rhymed creation.

Stop, comma, colon saturation?

Keep  just what you need.

 

Thinking now what we should write,

never dull nor dark nor trite;

at some times sad, at others bright;

feelings, love,  remembered sight,

sound, experience, hope and fear.

delight in what we see and hear,

feel and touch, taste and smell

observe the world, know it well.

 

We, and the world, have tales to tell.

May we, Oh may we tell them well.

 

 

John Berry, 21 June 2008 on a rainy day!

(For a bit of fun)

 

 

Author's Note

Not too serious, but speak your mind anyway.

Reviews

[Jason Henry]

if i ever want to inspire someone to write poetry, or to persuade someone to continue writing, i will share this with them...i love this write! it's very jovial and uplifting...thanks for sharing!

[Jaffa Forbes]

Indeed, it's certainly got the jovial tone.
Good stuff!
Jaff :)

[Thomas James Martin]

Well, I enjoyed it!
Tom