When You Come to the End of a Perfect Day.

When You Come to the End of a Perfect Day.

A Poem by JohnL

 

When You Come To the End of a Perfect Day
 
The green beneath my feet
glows warm in the afterglow of a perfect day
while sleepy wasps and bees
buzz – but softly – softly,
reluctant yet from sugared flowers to fly away;
arboured honey is suckled,
buddleia has yielded up its golden hoard
delighting hover-fly
butterfly,  as even I
move my mind toward rest, this perfect eve’.
 
A gentle, song of the night
A nocturne – drifts from somewhere
Perhaps it lives inside my head - (they do, you know)
A night-bird sits above, ‘Night Music’ to share,
gentler even than its own sweet song.
All is at peace – peace rare in human throng,
yet welcome as I sit – and sip a sweetling brew,
weathered, heathered where other bees have supped and sipped
On moorland hill and island stream, which purled
And grew – and drew;
sweet water of the north, whose peat-imparted flavours now endue
my glass with cheer, then lull me
Into the stillness of the night,
wakening me – late - with cooling, soft-descending dew.
                                      John L. Berry, 19 August 2009.

© 2009 JohnL


Author's Note

JohnL
First Draft

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

This writing could be nothing more that perfect for me, John!

'.. buddleia has yielded up its golden hoard delighting hover-flybutterfly, as even Imove my mind toward rest, this perfect eve'. ~ Purring with pleasure over those words...

It's beautiful.. it's how life should be with all its sounds and sights, its peace and gentle relaxation. As to the bonnie peat-embodied water - nigh heaven for you no doubt..

'.. then lull me Into the stillness of the night, wakening me � late - with cooling, soft-descending dew.' What lovely words: they make me sighhhh with pleasure and wish life could be like that always and always.

Rushing its way into Favourites. Thank you.



Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




Reviews

What a gorgeous write! It touched on all the senses! Well done:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


beautiful, it makes me envious I've never had a real grasp on how this kind of poetry is created. To be able to pull words out of yourself like that and create something thats beauty for beautys sake is out of mymy grasp

Posted 11 Years Ago


Very enjoyable. It reminds me of beautiful star lit nigts out in the country. I will have to put this one in my favorites. Great write my friend.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Stunning. I am lulled by your words. Your word choice and the weave of them are perfectly in tune creating a blanket of peace to nestle beneath. Now where's my cup of sweetling brew? I'm not sure what it is but I want one!

Posted 11 Years Ago


the living room is getting dark as I sit here reading . . . and I think about what a beautiful and perfect day it has been . . . and wonder how much lovelier tomorrow will be

I can't imagine that this is still draft form, it's so perfect and lovely to read

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem is completely remarkable. It takes you away to such a beautiful and tranquil place. I can close my eyes and just imagine it..and thats true poetry =]

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

My dear friend , thats so beautiful description how one should end his day, resting in his / her Garden and listening to the sounds of nature, smell the scene of the evening , and bless God for the time and pation for the beauty he created
Shalom Yossi

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very good. I cannot add more yet. I could learn from you as (being 56) I am just coming out of middle age into the true period wherein I must go to a river and pick up smooth rocks and such and sit marvelling at such things as nature leaves us to ponder.

I could appreciate such poetry as yrs as being wedded from voice to strong honest metaphor. Your well read in modern poetry and must own the English "Norton Anthology" I presume. thanks for such a good poem as this. I shall reread it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

[send message][befriend] Subscribe
LJW
First draft you say? With perhaps one adjustment in the meter (that I noticed), I'd say this is pretty near perfect.

The joys of retirement and nature smile all the way through this beautifully written poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pure class this poem is outstanding in the way that one would associate with poets who have long gone, for me to describe the feelings it fills me up with would in their essence be the pleasure that indeed be tasting the nectar on my tongue whilst the still wind blows by the side of a mill pond be upon me as i taste the first delights of nightfall

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


First Page first
Previous Page prev
1
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

836 Views
12 Reviews
Added on August 19, 2009
Last Updated on August 19, 2009
Previous Versions

Author

JohnL
JohnL

Wirral Peninsula, United Kingdom



About
I live in England, and love the English countryside, the music of Elgar and Holst which describes it so beautifully and the poetry of John Clare, the 'peasant poet' and Gerard Manley Hopkins, which d.. more..

Writing